Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that in the modern lifestyle the young people are the more independent person than young people were in the past. They have more freedom to make the decision about themselves in comparing to the past. contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that today's parents strongly support their children this work let to their children do not learn how should solve their problems, thus young people have not enough experience to make the decision independently. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that today young people have more freedom to choose their own way of living.
First and foremost, in the past families controlled by parents (mostly fathers) under strong discipline and each unauthorized behavior had the very hard response toward them. therefore, children mainly afraid of their parents and try to attract they're satisfied, so they do all of their work and decisions under parent opinions. Thus, even when they became the young person they have not the ability to make any contrast decision with them. this condition was more serious for girls. For example, my grandmother says that when she was very young most of the families decided about the marriage of their children without asking them. Sometimes the woman and man that want to married together did not see together until the marriage day.
on another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that today the knowledge of parents about the method of growing children changed completely toward past time. They get advice from the psychologist about the method of relationship with their children. Also, the public knowledge of people about the relationship with children and young people increases significantly. Parent from the early age learns to their children to make the decision by themselves. For example, let them choose their toys and their clothes. And when they become a teenager they just hand them for a correct decision not make the decision instead of them.
On the basis of reason that mentioned above, I am convinced that today children have a better personality and also freedom from making a decision. because of, increase in knowledge of people and alternation in parents points of view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08870967742 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51223592531 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508064516129 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9810328656 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.166666667 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466485221421 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149286101404 0.076458572812 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745155014356 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290729597042 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105813454885 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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