getting advice from others especially valuable person, was privilege among people science urban area wasn't developed. nowadays people use this way more than before. because today everything becomes more complex and even by having the knowledge it is impossible to succeed. today celebrities in a different area are one of the valuable people who others want to have their opinion and advice in order to someday being like them. I believe that younger people are more interested in them than the older one. in the following two reasons rendered:
First and foremost is that young people are more impressible than older people.there for they have more attention to the this famous person. for instance, last year there was a meeting between younger people of society and some of famous actor and actress . on that meeting they talk about how younger man should be hard worker and try to do anything that they can afford in order to be successful like them.after that meeting the government saw that the rate of unemployment has declined increasingly. they believe that this movement is the result of celebrities meeting. someday later the government decided to have like this meeting for middle age people. because they understood that wish to live has declined among them and celebrities could be good persons to motivate them. but unfortunately it didn't happen and none of them didn't have any attention to their opinion. this example clearly shows that how younger people impress from celebrities.
another reason which isn't less important than the first one is that being a celebrity is a wish of each young adult, therefore, they think that if they follow them they would become one of them. for example in my country too many people do exercise in a way that athletes do with this hope one day become a world athlete. like them. they follow them and work with them step by step and sometimes they even don't attend to their health .thus they might hurt themselves unwanted.in this way, unfortunately, there are some athletes who encourage their fans in a wrong way in order to get benefits of them by advertisement some fake nutrition drugs. older people are the past young people who one day follow them and might be harmed. older people lost their trust in the celebrities and they can't accept their opinion easily.
for the summary, young people are more impressible than the older one. they want to follow the famous people hens agree with their opinion, however, the older one has more experience and believes that all of the celebrities aren't trustful.by the way even this opinion have a negative effect or not they are more important for younger people than older one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90308370044 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46217613404 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458149779736 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.3730856527 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.3 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.5376344086 578% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252370171104 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914859457368 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733091856163 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189856779589 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580311534026 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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