By and large, it is established beyond doubt that history play a prominent role in all societies. Regarding this idea, some people may hold the view that, in universities students should be required to take history courses no matter their field of study is. Dou to the fact that we can learn huge experience about historical events that maybe repeated in future like wars and we can avoid these unnecessary actions. In contrary, others look at this issue through different lens and disagree it. In my vantage point, the latter view is true. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two important reasons.
The first focal point that prompts me to hold this view is that universities should generates experts in specific fields. Because we now live in a very complicated and modern age that everything needs it’s knowledge. For example, last term students from different field in university write a letter about irrelevant courses and wanted to eliminate these courses from their prospect courses. They argues that, instead of wasting time in unnecessary courses like history or polotetion, they can spend more time on their field of study and became expert at it. Also they mention that companies and factories required skilled student that can solve their problems and invent new methods. Their requirement is not possible unless, student they take more courses in their field. I would like to mention a research about successful students in their jobs. This research shows that the more students take courses in their field, the more they have the chance to get a decent job with high salary. In addition, they can increase gross domestic production by generating knowledge.
Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance in this subject is throw out psychological point, students refute to learn something that they are not interested. For instance, after writing that letter university president asked from professors in psychologic department to conduct a research about whether students learn and make advantage of irrelevant courses or not. The result of this research was astonishing. Over ninety percent of students states that they don’t pay attention at these classes actully, they prefer play with mobiles phone or surf the internet. Another ten percent didn’t even take part in classes. They would like stay at home or spend time with friend in cafeteria.
In conclusion, some people agree that students should not take irrelevant courses like history in university and I deeply believe in that. Not only do students refute to learn irrelevant courses, but also university should generates experts in specific fields. All universities should provide courses that are relevant to students field.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...vantage point, the latter view is true. In the following paragraphs, I will delve ...
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'generate'
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Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'argue'
Suggestion: argue
...urses from their prospect courses. They argues that, instead of wasting time in unnece...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...field of study and became expert at it. Also they mention that companies and factori...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
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Suggestion: generate
...ant courses, but also university should generates experts in specific fields. All univers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, regarding, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26651480638 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64912144846 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521640091116 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1243459479 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2916666667 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0145065668785 0.236089414692 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00406206015036 0.076458572812 5% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.013479514094 0.0737576698707 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00873429829341 0.150856017488 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00912473060799 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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