TPO 50 Independent Writing Task all university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is

My friend Jack recently told me that his university required all the student to take history courses. Their teacher thought that students should study history because they can learnt from the history, and they could get some solution to the problem by analyzing their precursor's view. However, I insist that university student shouldn't take mandatory history class.

Firstly, the additional mandatory history course will add academic burden and financial burden to the students. As a university student, I already have a very heavy burden in my major. For example, In order to earn one academic credit, I need to develop a computer system within three weeks and make a ten minutes presentation, so I really have no time to take another history class. Also, some students do not have enough money to cover the additional fee of the history class. Many student need to do some part-time job in order to feed themselves. If the required class asks them to take more job, I don't think the university student will support this policy.

Secondly, university students don't have need to take the history class. All of the students in China are required to take history class in the middle school. Take myself as an example, I have studied history for six year, and I have learnt about what happened in the world, from ancient people in Africa to World War 2, from Chinese dynasty to American democracy. As for university student, it is ridiculous to them if they need to study the knowledge twice. And if they are required to, they are likely missing the class, or impolite to the teacher, because they can pass the final exam easily.

Admittedly, history class is a good chance to let students know about what happened in history, and it can provide some wise ideas about dealing with social problems. But in my opinion, the required history class is not suitable to the university student, because they have no time, no money, and no need to take the class.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: learn
...s should study history because they can learnt from the history, and they could get so...
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Suggestion: shouldn't
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, as for, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83630952381 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45048578818 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494047619048 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1500536406 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5625 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296711988763 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121711004935 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666089289744 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213019610303 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500407492563 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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