With the advent of modern technology, it is undeniable that means of media, such as movies and television, have become an integral part of our daily life. This reality has led to a number of debates around the world on whether watching TV and movies is good for viewers, especially young ones. Although I admit these types of media can cause some troubles, I believe they are more beneficial than harmful.
First of all, considering all the benefits TV and movies have to offer young children, the advantages of watching them significantly outweigh the disadvantages. Human are capable of learning a lot better at a young age and these auditory-visual means of media are of great help. There is no shortage of channels where young viewers can be educated on different subjects that may not be taught at school or by their parents. For instance, I teach English for kids at a local center in town and sometimes I get really surprised at how well some of my kids are communicating in English while none of their parents is native speaker of this language. It turns out the parents have let them watch English contents and movies on TV ever since they were little so they have been able to acquire a new language just from watching. Apart from learning, no one can deny watching television and movies is a great way to not only entertain oneself, but also to know what is going on and thus have good discussions with friends and families.
On the other hand, the number of negative impacts resulted from watching movies and television are surely not a lot and can be easily avoided. Those concerning impacts mostly circle around the fear of inappropriate contents, ocular sickness and addiction, however, they will not be of any issues with the help of parents. Not just movies or television, anything in the life of a children can be detrimental to their health and personality if there is no guidance from grown-ups to let them know whether something is good to do. In the case of media, parents can simply control the contents young people can access and the amount of time for watching, or educate them on the negative effects television can bring. That way, we can make use of TV and movies for the best of the young while minimizing possible harms.
In conclusion, the benefits a young child can obtain from watching contents on the screen are obvious and undeniable. Although there might be some negative effects on young people mostly due to the lack of control and guidance from adults, they can be eliminated and thus not be of great concerns.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
... or television, anything in the life of a children can be detrimental to their health and ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 684, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'effects'' or 'effect's'?
Suggestion: effects'; effect's
...tching, or educate them on the negative effects television can bring. That way, we can ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, thus, well, while, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72706935123 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61634424735 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503355704698 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.3650604411 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0625 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9375 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157372561195 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563391535276 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334884379973 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102871719011 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020587661936 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.