TPO 52 The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Following the rules and enacting justice are the most important pillars for each society in today's world. As we live in a chaotic world, every decision that we take is uncertain. Thus, it is important for us to follow the rules even though they are strict. A controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether these rules are strict for young people or whether they aren't. Some people possess the conviction that these rules are strict and make young people feel pressured whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that these rules are fruitful. I am personally content that this issue is multifaceted. There are some reasons that these rules enacting and some of these rules are efficient. To substantiate my point of view the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is that these rules bring safety and pace to society. Due to the fact, that prices rose dramatically nowadays it is hard for the majority of society to effort in their lives. Furthermore, some of them assimilate into the wrong path like using drugs. Although they consume these drugs to improve their mood and out of the pressure, it affects badly on their body and mental health and sometimes make other people's lives in danger. Consider my personal experience to make this point more clear. I was in high school period that one of my friends started to use drugs. She lived in a rich family but her parents got divorced so it affected her. One time after the consumption she drove fast and hit another car, an old lady, and run away.
The second rationable fact behind this opinion is that young people are emotional and they get easily discouraged. They are curious and they want to explore and experience new things but sometimes they lose the right path and hurt themself. I think if someone explains to them why these rules are set and what are the advantages of following these rules they can accept those rules easily.
In brief, due to the aforementioned reasons, I disagree with this statement that the rules that society expects young people to follow are too strict.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...strict for young people or whether they arent. Some people possess the conviction tha...
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Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...g reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is that these rules bring...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, i think, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82933333333 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46735125635 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554666666667 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5814160469 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.55 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277710304597 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795458558678 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103096892949 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208576798917 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14253824002 0.0645574589148 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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