In modern societies, if you are under eighteen, there are some rules you are expected to comply to, irrespective of where you are in the world. Although many grown-ups would say following rules is for the best of society and young people themselves, I'm of the opinion that such strict rules won't guarantee a better world or better lives of the young.
First of all, everyone born and raised on this planet deserves the right to lead a life they desire, including the young. The fact that every human only lives once truly makes some certain restrictions put on young humans appear unreasonable. If young people were legitimately treated the same as other adults around them, they would get to experience life to the fullest, just like how their same kind are doing, without having to wait until their age reaches a certain number. It is sad to think about the number of people that didn't get the chance to celebrate their adult ceremony and unlock fun activities in life that only grown-ups are allowed to do, such as driving or traveling alone. Of course, they would have to acquire some fundamental education and learn to take responsibility for their own behaviors, yet age shouldn't be a limit to their experience in life.
On the other hand, rules that are too rigid can have opposite effects on young people, who are always curious and not afraid of anything. It is undeniable that rules and restrictions can actually trigger the young's curiosity, especially when those regulations only apply on them. For example, some students may wonder why they are not permitted to smoke while their parents are. As curious as they are, students may find a way to try smoking or drinking alcohol and develop unhealthy habits. This is only one of the cases where strict rules don’t maintain the discipline of society as well as the well-being of young students. Therefore, the focus should not be placed on keeping the underage under control with rigid regulations based on the norms, but on educating them to become a wholesome generation who know what they should and shouldn’t do.
In conclusion, it is true some rules and regulations should be strictly enforced in order to keep the society in peace. That being said, the rules should also be applied to every citizens and not just one particular age group since everyone was born with the same human rights.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, of course, such as, as well as, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83251231527 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5023321404 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546798029557 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.7932497273 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.8 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0666666667 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2 5.45110844103 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170073841951 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571227215603 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519206086313 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11464056685 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700484336322 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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