TPO 52Do you agree or disagree?The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Without a shadow of the doubt, following rules play a vital role in social development and improvement. By having rules in a society people will have a more convenient life because in this way they have safety in community. Many people contend taht the rules that societies expect young people to follow are too strict, while others disagree. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be some what cinvincing and stand to point. However, my personal experienc and actual observation of life have led me to agree that obeying from these rules are necessary. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and probably the paramount reason is that having certain rules are necessary for having a good life and also these rule are a key for creating a enhancement community. Also, If we do not have rules and we do not pursue these rules we cannot be succeed in our lives. Besides, consider a young children who does not want to go to her/his school. So, this little kid cannot obtain skills and increase her abilities. As aresult, she cannot enter university and we all know that entering universities is a so much promising step into a world of opportunities. As you can see, by following rules people can benefit the advantages. The more we follow the rules, the greater our chance to be a successful person. People should follow these rules to emprove their knowledge and after that they can use their knowledge in their jobs. Then we can have a modern society.
Another point springing to mind is that rules are essential to have a community without crimes. Consider a world that people can do whatever they want? Is these world safe? Without rules criminals start to do their catastrophic actions. Consequently, other people cannot do their roles in society and our community will be full of criminals, thives, victims, and murderers. Moreover, by setting rules and foring people to obay them we can control this kind of violations and also, we can decrease the criminal rate in society. I remember last year, a criminal had captured in Isfahan city in mu country, Iran. After that, this criminal releas the name of the people who was in her group. So, the police could capture them. As a result, the criminal rate decreased in Isfahan city. Thus, Following rules not only assists to have a safe nation, but also is helpful for controling bad behavior of criminals. The more and more we follow rules, the more we can use its benefits.
As you can see, it is easy to see the advantages of following rules in comparison to ignore them. By following rules we can create an ideal country and also we can have safety in it. I hope someday all people convince themselves to follow rules.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: SOME_WHAT_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somewhat' (=slightly)?
Suggestion: somewhat
... of the opposing arguments appear to be some what cinvincing and stand to point. However,...
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Line 2, column 154, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... also these rule are a key for creating a enhancement community. Also, If we do n...
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Line 2, column 302, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'child'?
Suggestion: child
...in our lives. Besides, consider a young children who does not want to go to her/his scho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, while, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72058823529 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56118803835 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495798319328 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8921377958 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8666666667 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.56666666667 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228105351275 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617383279923 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772472914767 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161852312043 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638060208188 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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