During the last few decades, technological advancement makes our life easier and sophisticated. In my view, because of technological advancement, children have become more creative. Therefore, I disagree with the statement. I think this way for mainly two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, children see different incredible things on the internet which helps them to think creatively. A long ago, when computers and the internet were not available, children did not have the opportunity to see different innovative things on the internet. They could not be able to see the manufacturing process of different products. But now children have internet and different kinds of television channels, from where they can see the different mechanisms of different products and how these products are being manufactured. My own experience is a compelling example of this. About 12 years ago, when I was studying at school, my school arranged a science fair program. I wanted to participate in the program, but I had no idea what I will present in the science fair program. Then, I searched on the internet and had found something interesting. Form those findings, I came up with a great idea about the reduction of traffic jams in the city. After that, I started to make my project and finished the project very successfully. Then, I presented the project in the science fair program and got third place in the fair and became so happy. This was impossible if I had not the internet.
Second, technology makes things accessible to all, which advances our skills and thinking. Due to technological advancement, kids can have a computer in his hand. And this computer makes them creative and more intelligent. For example, about 15 years ago, when I was 9 years old, I had a friend named Jony. Jony was very fond of playing games on the computer. While playing games one day he thought, instead of playing games, he will make games. So, he started searching for how to make computer games. After exploring a lot, he was able to learn that to make games he has to know computer programming. Therefore, at that age, he started learning programming from reading books and watching YouTube videos. After lots of practice and learning, he was able to become a very good computer programmer. After a few years, he became a very well-known software engineer in our country. If he had not a computer, then he could not be able to become a software engineer at that very young age.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the statement because instead of making less creative, technology makes kids think more creatively.
- TPO 9 - Integrated essay 3
- integrated writing TPO 7 47
- TPO 4 _ Independent TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- TPO 6 integrated writing 34
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 68
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 648, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...efore, at that age, he started learning programming from reading books and watching YouTube...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, well, while, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94831460674 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87736114709 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487640449438 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6519042712 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9310344828 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3448275862 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37931034483 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0868504592465 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0278854982803 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429242230443 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824301374136 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048633290892 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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