TPO 6 integrated writing
The author of the passage states that online encyclopedias will not be worthwhile for several reasons. however, the professor opposes this by saying that the online encyclopedias will be better than traditional encyclopedias and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading cast doubt of the authenticity of online information that the encyclopedia provides by saying that they are not written by experts. The professor refutes this point by saying that the existing traditional encyclopedia is not accurate as well. The error information of the traditional encyclopedia is hard to correct because it is printed. In contrast, the error of the online encyclopedia can be corrected easily compared to the traditional encyclopedia.
Second, the article posits that there are possibilities of fabrication of the online encyclopedia's information by dishonest users and hackers. however, the professor says that the authority takes two important steps: a special format that prevents hacking and special auditors board who always check for fabrication, to prevent corruption and false information.
Finally, the reading says that excessive detail information on a topic will often create false impression and people will not be able to distinguish what is important and what is unnecessary. The professor opposes this point by explaining that the detail information will attract and facilitate users because of its diversified information on a topic that is not possible in the traditional encyclopedia due to lack of space.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... not be worthwhile for several reasons. however, the professor opposes this by saying t...
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Line 13, column 86, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'encyclopedias'' or 'encyclopedia's'?
Suggestion: encyclopedias'; encyclopedia's
...sibilities of fabrication of the online encyclopedias information by dishonest users and hack...
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Line 13, column 144, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...rmation by dishonest users and hackers. however, the professor says that the authority ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, well, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 233.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69957081545 5.08290768461 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19701296422 2.5805825403 124% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 145.348785872 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480686695279 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 412.2 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3935340322 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.8 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3 21.698381199 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.3589403974 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 53.8541721854 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 5.55761589404 234% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.2367328918 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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