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Many people think that technology has bad effect on students. They say that, for example, accessing the internet wastes a lot of time and disturb students from their studying. Although I understand their point of view, I have another opinion. I believe that technology has a great benefit on the students, it helps them to gather many information in short time, and it helps them by being available at any time.
First, technology helps students gather considerable amount of information in short time. Clicking few buttons on a computer’s keyboard may take few minutes, but will save several hours of searching among books’ pages. I can remember when I was in high school, our teacher asked us to make a research about the ameba in a biology class. At that time there wasn’t a broad access to the internet. I went to the library spending two or three hours daily for five days to gather the needed information. I took me too much time and effort. On the other hand, when I was in the collage, the pharmacology professor asked us to do a research on certain drug effect on the kidney. I went to the library carrying my laptop. It took me few minutes to access the internet. I surfed several webpages and many scientific magazines web sites. In a couple of hours I was done with my research. When we use computer it is so easy to go directly to the required information, no need to read a lot of pages to get to the needed point. This shows how the technology helps in getting much information while saving a lot of time.
Second, technology makes the information available at any time. Technology now makes it easy for everybody to have internet access for twenty four hours every day. Means we can surf the internet any time we need, we are not limited to the library hours any more to do our home works or researches. On my final year of the collage, we were required to make a project and handed by the end of the semester. It was a big project, requires a lot of searches and studying. But being busy with the other studying subjects, didn’t allow me enough hours during the day to do the project. The only solution was to work on the project for an hour every night. Here it comes, thanks for technology, having access to the internet any time was the savior for me. I made it and finished my project before the dead line. The technology saved my success. If the internet and the information were not available at any time, I wouldn’t ever make it to finish my project.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I encourage all people to know and appreciate the benefits of technology in students’ lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...n the students, it helps them to gather many information in short time, and it helps...
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Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...n the students, it helps them to gather many information in short time, and it helps them by bei...
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Line 2, column 301, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...gh school, our teacher asked us to make a research about the ameba in a biology class. At ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'broad access'.
Suggestion: broad access
...y class. At that time there wasn't a broad access to the internet. I went to the library ...
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Line 2, column 639, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...e pharmacology professor asked us to do a research on certain drug effect on the kidney. I...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-four
...r everybody to have internet access for twenty four hours every day. Means we can surf the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in short, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6067653277 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71727357202 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7921177517 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.1379310345 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3103448276 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.51724137931 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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