TPO30- task2
All over the world, companies have different rules for hours of working. Also, one of the most important elements that employees should enjoy to work sufficiently is working week. In some companies employees choose the way they work. Some people prefer working five days a week but in short time, while others enjoy working long hours just three days a week and free their other days. I am of the opinion that it is better for individuals to allocate five days with short time to the work. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
To begin with, working shortly five days a week, lets individuals to have enough fun and rest in the rest of the day. So, they would be more energetic in the working hours, and their mind would be fresh and ready to start a new project. They can work more sufficient, and at the end of each project they feel more satisfying. To illustrate, two years ago, I used to work and study all day long. Not having enough time to rest, I wasn’t fresh enough at the time of working. Once, I had an important appointment and I forgot to bring some necessary papers and it had bad effect on my work. Had I rested enough, I wouldn’t make that mistake.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that resting enough has a direct effect on individual’s health. Working hard and long can cause diseases which are related to eyes, neck, spinal cord, etc. some of these problems could be irremediable, that’s why it is better to prevent them by working in short times. For example, as I used to work all day long, my eyes got weak, and I had to use glasses. Moreover, I got some problems in my neck because of staring at monitor in a bad position for long time. After visiting the doctor, to become healthy, I changed my life style, and I decided to distribute my work over five days of week.
All in all, I firmly agree that due to the direct effect of rest time on health, it’s better for people to work shorter in more days than working full hours in less days. By doing so individuals work more sufficient, and both employee and boss would be pleased.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...in more days than working full hours in less days. By doing so individuals work more...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in short, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52926208651 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51218372808 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508905852417 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7748315322 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.7619047619 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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