Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that unfortunately, parents have not enough free time to spend it with their children, in my opinion, this time is that children want to spend with their parent, is their fun time so it is better that they serve this time in playing with their friends and sports and other amazing things. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that today we live in a very competitive world so, it is very useful for children to spend any free time for learning more and more ability and extra skills that surely would be helpful for their future. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that the free time certainly should be served to some hobby and also helpful activities.
First and foremost, when parents cannot this opportunity to spend time with their children this happen itself has a very bad effect on children mind because they present in the age that needs a good relationship with their parents. Thus, creating some compel for them to doing some schoolwork and learning some more difficult ability that is not very interesting for them in this age provide some extra pressure on their mind and can be threaten their mental healthy, the psychologist certified this concept and mentioned that children naturally need childhood activity like playing and some aerobic activities so we never avoiding them from their natural habit.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that the schoolwork is not sole useful ability for children, and clearly some activities, for example, sports and even playing games have a lot of benefit for children. in addition these activities can eliminate bor and depression from children and getting to them a happy and open mind for learning, this activities can improve their social abilities and relationship skills and these are very necessary for success in our modern world.
Finally, yet importantly, during childly play, children learn how managed their time without the presence of their parents. In this shape that they learn how have the happy time and also decreases the stress of non presence of parents beside themselves.
On the bases of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that children should be spending their free time on some fun activity when they cannot spend this time with their parents. Because they naturally need fun and playing and these activities powers their social ability and also help to them to have the healthy mind.
- TPO 43 80
- TPO 47- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 63
- Young people enjoy life more than older people do.Do you agree or disagree? 73
- TPO 50 3
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. 65
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, still, thus, for example, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01216545012 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41246996067 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479318734793 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.1344086022 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.8006386155 48.9658058833 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 187.272727273 100.406767564 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.3636363636 20.6045352989 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301383578336 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143234707243 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812594199742 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196061408665 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640679590461 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 11.7677419355 177% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 58.1214874552 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.1575268817 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.002688172 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.0537634409 167% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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