TPO44-Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the affection support of children by parents is the principal need of each child, and the educational issues present in the second step of importance. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that success in the education determined the success of children in their future life. So parents should full in all of the children's' free time by schoolwork. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports.

First and foremost, the fun plays can provide happier time for children than activities related to schoolwork. For example, when I was a child I was most of the time alone at home. Nontheless, everynight my father and me spending one hour for playing computer games. It was the most intersting time that all days I really expected. However, I should have two hours mathmatic practice with my mother. I was really love my mother but it is not one of my favorte memeries.

Anothre sginificant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that today the children's scheduals are highly full with schools' time, homwork and extra-classes schoolworks. Therefore, children need some entertainments to maintain positive feelings and mental healthy. The childhood preiod is the happiest season of each person life, so it should not be sacrifice any other aims.

Finally, yet importantly, not only using free times for fun activities would not damage to children education, but also play can encourage cognitive development and increase children's inteligent. The social intelligent has very imortant role in people success. During plays children learn approperiate behaviors from their parenst. Children with nice behaior would be more like with others and accepted in the society and they would have better chance for a successful life in future.

On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that the best use of few free time of the busy parents is fun playing games or sports. Beacuse, it provide feeling of support and love for childen, increase their mental health and their intelligence.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 369, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... future life. So parents should full in all of the childrens free time by schoolwork. Howe...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'loved'.
Suggestion: loved
...c practice with my mother. I was really love my mother but it is not one of my favor...
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Line 7, column 475, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ave better chance for a successful life in future. On the basis of reasons that were ...
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Line 9, column 166, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...un playing games or sports. Beacuse, it provide feeling of support and love for childen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, really, second, so, still, therefore, for example, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01075268817 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70185763616 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0002885495 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1052631579 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408267787477 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112830740515 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135587098528 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217404755367 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10612110293 0.0645574589148 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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