TPO45-second try
Without any doubt decision making is one of the most important part in our life. A number of young people try to be independent from their family. In this regret, I have to admit that I totally agree with this statement. There are couple of reasons in support of my idea. Firstly, modern young people have much more complex mind than before. Secondly, technology and internet make decision process easier for people. I will elaborate my reasons in this essay and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample examples.
The fist exquisite point to be mentioned is that individuals have much more complex minds than before. People have to deal with modern technology. In this way, their mind shape in different aspects with a huge number of connections and complexity. Young people mind have ability to adopt itself with different situations and make a best choice. With young minds have logical orders, in addition without parents’ dependency they make decisions. My personal anecdote will well demonstrate this point of view. I was born in computer era and from my childhood I had to deal with smartphones. Every day I learned new things. To make a long story short, these devices prepare my mind for future decision making. Not to mention, the mind struggle games also very beneficial to teach me how to make decision on myself.
The second reason come to mind is that young people could easily find their questions in internet, or by sharing their situation on social networks obtain the best decision of their lives. The story of my younger brother could justify my idea. He had a problem on living dormitory or not. By explaining his problem on internet, everybody suggested a reason. Finally, he decide what to do and made a proper decision without dependency in our parents.
Taken all aspects mentioned above into consideration, I pretty convinced that young people are able to make decision on their own, due to the fact that, they have complex mind which enable them to make decision quickly and efficiently. Furthermore, by vast number of information resources, young people could acquire more knowledge and share their own information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 330, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...self with different situations and make a best choice. With young minds have logi...
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Line 3, column 370, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...erybody suggested a reason. Finally, he decide what to do and made a proper decision w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9696969697 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63688892867 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542699724518 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.205466448 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.1666666667 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.125 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0369925246933 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0103884925742 0.076458572812 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283902243633 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0258392007916 0.150856017488 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278335182561 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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