In twenty years, there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.
Since the dawn of humanity, human beings have been engaged in a great struggle between living in an enjoyable manner and accomplishing their duties, for good and evil both exist in human nature. With this in mind, some people think that nowadays mankind are mostly engaged in activities bringing about happiness for them rather than striving to carry out their responsibilities, while others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the first attitude carries more weight for several reasons, three of the most substantial are discussed below.
The most compelling reason is that in today's modern world, human's lifestyle, as it commonly perceived, has been affected by the galloping rate of technological arrivals offering a more convenient life. As everything is facilitated in an excellent fashion since childhood, and because whatever one wished to have, it would be provide in the blink of an eye, individuals not only are not accustomed to the hardship, but also have lost their motivations. They think to anything that helps them to escape from their responsibilities.
Another reason why I do not concur with the latter perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that people used to have a world view, either philosophical or religious, that made them feel responsible for themselves and their societies. They believe that everyone has a role in world, and he or she is required to do their best in order to completely fulfill it, which leads to advance their society in a whole, and giving meaning to one's life in particular. However, due to events in the past, people do not no longer have their constructive, and have lost their commitment to their societies. Most individuals, especially the youth, do not have any goals in their lives, seeking their fortune in enjoyable life. According to a research conducted in one of the reputable universities in my country, the majority of suicides are partially because of lacking targets in one's life.
Last but not least, it is crystal clear that as time passes, more technologies and facilities will be offered than can be tempting for everyone. Today, one is able to have access to a great variety of entertainments such as Internet, cell phones, computers, to name but a few that are different from those in the past in one aspect, which is their ability to addict people so that sometimes one are inhibited from their necessary works. It is statistically proven that most of the cell phones holder sleep with their cell ones overnight, which indicates that how influential these technologies are.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, It seems to me that it stands to reason that nowadays, people spend most of their time on the grounds that even though technological arrivals and facilities are considered as a panacea for all problems, they have adversely influenced individuals' life, changing the meaning of life for them, making them feel indifference about their future and their societies. In addition, people are no longer tend to make effort so as to achieve valuable things in comparison to the past.
- TPO 32 86
- tpo 8.Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. 86
- In twenty years, there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. 80
- TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 87
- extra 1 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an enjoyable manner" with adverb for "enjoyable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...aged in a great struggle between living in an enjoyable manner and accomplishing their duties, for goo...
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Line 2, column 231, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent fashion" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ient life. As everything is facilitated in an excellent fashion since childhood, and because whatever o...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ciety in a whole, and giving meaning to ones life in particular. However, due to eve...
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Line 3, column 884, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...partially because of lacking targets in ones life. Last but not least, it is crysta...
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Line 5, column 497, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...eople are no longer tend to make effort so as to achieve valuable things in comparison t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in particular', 'in summary', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.205574912892 0.229887763892 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.175958188153 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0801393728223 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0522648083624 0.046263068375 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0696864111498 0.0685040099705 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.141114982578 0.118717715034 119% => OK
Participles: 0.0609756097561 0.0351676179071 173% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91471270553 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0383275261324 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00174216027875 0.00188951952338 92% => OK
Determiners: 0.0731707317073 0.0887237588012 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00522648083624 0.0209618222197 25% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0174216027875 0.0139019557991 125% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3139.0 2387.08602151 131% => OK
No of words: 518.0 408.028673835 127% => OK
Chars per words: 6.05984555985 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355212355212 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.258687258687 0.251872472559 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194980694981 0.174417080927 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.146718146718 0.112833075102 130% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91471270553 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53667953668 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 65.8407695662 59.2087087015 111% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 32.375 20.5533526081 158% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.0022058537 48.84282405 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 196.1875 120.699889404 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.375 20.5533526081 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.644075263715 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 58.2437258687 45.7405998639 127% => OK
Elegance: 1.36842105263 1.45489161554 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16676908282 0.300154397459 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12201738109 0.103427244359 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0661900793705 0.0752933317313 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.593717910541 0.497263757937 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.129449899644 0.151897553556 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083863881227 0.114077575197 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464795282292 0.0781384742642 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.384495514628 0.336927656856 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0629498570578 0.067059652881 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120998455482 0.210909579961 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293885621831 0.0618886996521 47% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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