what you should choose between buying a house or buying a business if you got the money?
If someone asked me to choose between buying a house or buying a business if i got the money, i will definitly choose to buy a house.To me , having my own house is the dream that i was chasing all my life.And i think there is nothing much better than realstate investments.To be a house owner is the key to success in future for two reasons.
First, I believe that real estate investments such as buying a house is the best achievement in my life. Since i was always dreaming of having a big house that would be suitable for my expanding family. Actually i live with my husband and we have 3 kids, in an apartment which is not appropriate for us . On the other hand my parents, brothers and sisters they also live in another apartment which is very far from our living area .So,in order to visit them every weekend, this is very difficult for me to drive such a long distance , however my husband's mother is also living in different apartment alone .So i dreamed that one day i will buy big house for all of us and my kids will raise in a healthy environment, with their grandparents and beloved family.
Second, In my point of view, investing your money on buying a house is more secure than business .Because business is risky and it really needs someone who have a good knowledge of management and business. Further more, business requires full attention and time from you,in spite of all these you may loose your business one day and if that happened ,in order to sell your business you will sell it much lesser than half of it is actual cost. Therefore buying a house is more profitable and successful.Once i decided to run a business one day, i can take a loan from the bank easily ,since i am a house owner,they will provide me with the money i need it .Suppose this business does not work well, i will sell it any time and return the money back without loosing my own house.
In conclusion, for all the reasons i mentioned above, i believe that buying a house for my expanding family is my great achievement in this life .And the secure choice for a successful future .So i suggest that every person should think wisely and invest his money in a secure way, such as buying his own house,than buying a risky business.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion, such as, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42335766423 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51958187847 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501216545012 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 45.0 20.1344086022 223% => Sentence length is too long
Sentence length SD: 122.583305008 48.9658058833 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 202.0 100.406767564 201% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.6666666667 20.6045352989 222% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.6666666667 5.45110844103 287% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 48.0 5.5376344086 867% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317180196408 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13490165026 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911857404024 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206580709735 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948164173408 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.2 11.7677419355 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 10.1575268817 182% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.24 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.0537634409 199% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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