Most will agree that education does not need to be limited to the conventional, academic subjects of language, math, history and science. However, the other, non-academic subjects that are often included in schools’ curriculums are generally seen as secondary. In the case of physical education, that may very well be true. Physical education, although enjoyable for students, offers very little educational value. However, classes that foster creativity, such as art or music, are an important asset to children’s development. They should not be eliminated so readily.
The primary purpose of a school is to develop the minds of its students. This is precisely why the main, academic school subjects are seen as more valuable. Unfortunately, it is easy to overlook how important creative subjects can be for a child’s mental growth. From my own life experience, I can also say that artistic outlets can help to foster a more critical, analytical mindset. By listening carefully to a guitar line in a song I liked so that I could learn it, I picked apart subtle patterns that I would not have seen otherwise. Had I not studied music as a child, I’m fairly certain I would not have developed some analytical skills I now have. Eliminating those creative classes from a school curriculum would be harmful.
On the other hand, physical education brings few clear benefits other than fun, and even the entertainment value is not very high. I, for one, disliked gym classes almost half the time when I was a child. Baseball was a treat, but volleyball was a chore, for example. And today, I cannot say that those classes helped me to grow. I would have exercised enough without them, certainly, as I played football in the street and climbed trees with my friends after school was finished. Granted, those classes offered a short time to take a break from studies, but they were not necessary. Children get more value from classes that help them to develop a specific mental skill.
Essentially, school should provide students the opportunity to challenge themselves in a way that they would not, if left to their own devices. The main benefit of physical education classes is exercise, but students can do that on their own. Art and music, however, require guidance and tools. If a school must cut one of the non-academic courses from its curriculum, physical education should be cut first.
- Money spent on research is almost always a good investment even when the results of that research are controversial 55
- Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote. 60
- Those who see their ideas through, regardless of doubts or criticism others may express, are the ones who tend to leave a lasting legacy. 62
- When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why? 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, well, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.055 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84691060625 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8677824072 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.25 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268971758928 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721923792182 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619361213081 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166711171213 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690587188936 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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