whether today young people are better able to make decesions about their own lives without their parents' help compared with the past
There is no doubt that parents play an important part in our life, and it is them that lead us into a right direction. On many occasions, the young people depend on their parents to make decisions. However, whether today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives without their parents' help compared with the past is debated. Personally speaking, I assert that the young people are more independent especially when taking the rapid development of society and the departure between young people and their parents into consideration.
Admittedly, nowadays the young people usually can't take good care of them and some of them need their parents to help them in daily life, like washing clothes, doing the cooking and so on. However, what should be pointed out is that the phenomenon also happens in the past.
Firstly, parents can't follow the pace of society development, as a result, they can't give some instructive advice to young people. For example, when I graduated from the high school, I wanted to major in engineering after I enter college. However, I were afraid that my parents won't allow me to do that because they always hold an opinion that no one can earn a lot of money by engaging in engineering. But, what is impressive is that my parents just said that you can
do what you want to do. As they confessed, they have little knowledge about college, everything in the future should be done by myself. So, the poor acquaintance about life today allow the young people make decisions freely.
Secondly, due to the advent of industrialization, more and more young people work in big cities in order to get higher salary, which is far away from their parents. Consequently, young people have to face everything independently. Take my brother, Tom as an example. He works in the Microsoft company which lies in Beijing, and my home is in Anhui province, 2000 kilometers from Beijing. Therefore, my brother have few chance to return home. In daily life, he has to make every decision by himself because no one is around him and help him. So it is more likely that the young people are independent due to the departure with their parents.
In conclusion, based on the reasons I stated above, I still insist that compared with the past, the young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives today.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...osoft company which lies in Beijing, and my home is in Anhui province, 2000 kilom...
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...rom Beijing. Therefore, my brother have few chance to return home. In daily life, he has t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8230958231 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59981048209 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515970515971 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9269128697 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.15 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.35 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442823785822 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135666246499 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.193733085279 0.0737576698707 263% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250783704672 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.197740015143 0.0645574589148 306% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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