You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice
When it comes to the issue that what is it that you want to do for improving your community? It is quite normal that everyone has different answers for this question. As far as I am concerned, I could spend several hours each month for working in a public park, which is an adverse condition. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
The first and most important reason is that if we have a proper park, many people will want to come to this place. In my town is not any recreation that people could devote their time for them. There is one park, which have so many garbage and addicted people that cause families ignore this place on the weekend. In this way, improving park conditions assist people to have more joyful time, and they will make pleasure experiences. For example, in fall you can walk through trees, which likes an awesome colorful paint. In spring, you can enjoy hearing singing of birds, or their dance in clear sky. Generally, this park can relive people from heavy daily pressures.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. This park is a unique place that juveniles can do many activities there. Teenagers here like other people are boring and need activities to keep them busy and out of troubles. After school time, they can go to the park to play badminton, practicing soccer, and riding bicycle. Overall, the biggest advantage of an appropriate park lies in the fact that helps juveniles to fill their leisure properly.
Apart from the points I made above, park can play a crucial role to provide better conditions for living. As we all know that, air pollution is the main cause of diseases, and people need to possess fresh air. There are plenty of small lakes, which can keep balance humanity in the air. In addition, trees could absorb carbon dioxide and release oxygen into air as well as filter dusts. In this way, having a park is a blessing for people, who live neighborhood it.
Taking into account all of these factors, we may reach the conclusion that this park obviously is a best place for family to get together on the weekend, and provide plenty of sports facilities for youth, and increase air quality. Last but not least, let us hope people become more responsible for their environment and attempt to improve it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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Suggestion:
...nvironment and attempt to improve it.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'apart from', 'for example', 'in addition', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24449339207 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.149779735683 0.158761421928 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.079295154185 0.0866891130778 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0440528634361 0.046263068375 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0594713656388 0.0685040099705 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116740088106 0.118717715034 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0198237885463 0.0351676179071 56% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.34949137887 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0286343612335 0.0309702414327 92% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0814977973568 0.0887237588012 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0308370044053 0.0209618222197 147% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0176211453744 0.0139019557991 127% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2296.0 2387.08602151 96% => OK
No of words: 405.0 408.028673835 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66913580247 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308641975309 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.197530864198 0.251872472559 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.133333333333 0.174417080927 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0888888888889 0.112833075102 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34949137887 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567901234568 0.524397521467 108% => OK
Word variations: 66.6652071269 59.2087087015 113% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6086956522 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1267755305 48.84282405 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8260869565 120.699889404 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6086956522 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.478260869565 0.644075263715 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 37.3617820719 45.7405998639 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.50434782609 1.45489161554 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27155652925 0.300154397459 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0769930075017 0.103427244359 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0466156929826 0.0752933317313 62% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.454883858604 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113368782 0.151897553556 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862348494057 0.114077575197 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07351255632 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.31826081578 0.336927656856 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0423125976712 0.067059652881 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170458836877 0.210909579961 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387371751405 0.0618886996521 63% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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