You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy?
One of the key aspect in life is to learn what to do with the money earned, in other words, this is called financial management. One may opt for buying a house or using the money to purchase a business. However, I definitely prefer to buy a business rather a house, mainly because buying a business could be more profitable, it has the same level of risk and If the business chosen is good enough, I could by a house as well.
Firstly, a business could increase your investment, this is not a secret, and the support of this statement is very simple. Business are made for earning more money, hence if you invest in a business you have the chance of dramatically increase your income. However, to succeed in a business it is necessary to develop a good business model to minimize the risks involved.
Secondly, it is all about risk. Unfortunately, there is not such a thing as a 100% secure investment, there is always a risk involved, the only thing that we could decide is how much of that risk are we willing to take considering the money we want to earn. For example, the vast majority of the people may consider that buying a house is a secure investment, but actually no matter how much the value of a house is, if somebody decide to build a jail in my backyard, my investment worth nothing. Moreover, identifying the risk of property could be more difficult than other type of business, so in my opinion the risk level involved is quite the same .
Finally, if every goes well we can buy a nicer house, in other words, If we succeed with the business, then we will have more money to buy a bigger and nicer house. For example, I know many people who have made great investment and the with the money they have bought several houses.
To conclude, we can say that having some savings, we all have the possibility of buying a house or invest in a business, however, If a person can tolerate some degree of risk in their life, then, they should invest in a good business, that way they will have more money to buy a nicer house
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: decides
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Suggestion: .
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41755319149 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50874260234 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457446808511 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.2052089567 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.769230769 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9230769231 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6153846154 5.45110844103 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242642757181 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881012542286 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084226292607 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142067608433 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512083352765 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.95 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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