I agree with the prompt. I think young people are the ones who enjoys the most.
Some people argue that older people are the ones who enjoy the most as they have no worries of their study, jobs and other stuffs. They are the one enjoying their life to fullest. However, i strongly agree that young ones enjoy the most and i will support my view point in following paragraphs.
Firstly, they are so young that everything they does are so novel and rookie. They will be experiencing everything for the first time and they are always excited and eager to do to anything it comes their way. For example: a child is taken to a swimming pool for the first time and he learns to be familiar with the level of water and then finally learns to play with the water. We can see how excited and happy, the child is. He is eager to learn more and just plays with the circumstances. Likewise, the same level of excitement and the energy is barely seen in the old peoples as they have been obsolete in those forms of entertainment.
Secondly, the level of energy is also high in young peoples than in old peoples. For example; there is some kind of running race in a locality. All kind of age group peoples are attending the race. Some old ones where as some young ones. As the race starts, the young ones are able to run with such high level of energy than the people of old age. And we can see, their pace decreasing after running for certain distance. The real feeling of race is experienced by just the young ones as they completes the race. Furthermore, it's not just about the race, in any kind of physical workout activities like trekking,hiking etc, young ones are always forward and are enjoying the trip.
Thirdly, as we can see many forms of entertainment are being updated and technology are leading the way, young ones are the ones who is taking the whole benefit by themselves as the older people can't have that fun since they can't understand it and operate them. For examples; mobile games and computer games are played with prowess by the young ones and the old ones don't even know how to unlock the mobiles.
In conclusion, whether the young ones enjoy more or the old ones has been a complex subject in themselves as we can see, old ones, being updated to the technology and the innovations, are enjoying to their fullest than the young ones. And the fit and healthy old people are enjoying the trip all around. However, the maximum numbers of young ones always out numbers those old ones as we can see young ones comes with the new ideas of enjoying their life and have fun in their life no matter what. So , young ones enjoy the most.
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...erything for the first time and they are always excited and eager to do to anythi...
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...ave fun in their life no matter what. So , young ones enjoy the most.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44238683128 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27552091571 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417695473251 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3262384554 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.36 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.44 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253535579452 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857041170171 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634145951203 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160057851443 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651891039399 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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