Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that young people are more sensitive about events that occure around them and the social issuse is more important for them than this issuse was important for young people in the past time. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that Noe the young people do not responsible toward other people around themselves. They believe that young people serve their time for low importance activities and just think about things that is hubby for them. I, to a great extent disagree with this idea that today young people do not give enough time to helping their communities.
First and foremost, today we can see that most of social groups that they are active about society cocepts are organized and guided by young people. Especially, the universities cummunities are so active in this fields. For example, we have a group in our university that managing sevral plan to coserving environment like cleaning the forests and sea or cofilict with governemt plans or some privet companies that can damage to healthy of our natural resources.
on another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that today it is very common between young people to starting travel to different parts of their country or other countries, to watching life style and life condition of other people. In my country Iran there is a big student community that build by a young undergrade student of university of Sharif. She was very percise about people who lived in the poor region of Iran. She traveled to Sistan and Balouchestan and saw their live situation. After she comeback to the university she stared to awareing othre students and people about the bad condition of these people and she could do a lot helpful alternation to these poeple, for example, build of new schools and hospitals fro them through callecting money from people.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above I am convinced that young people nowdays give more helping to their community than the young people do in the past. because, today young people have more knowledge and freedom to knowing and ability to help to another people.
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. 71
- For the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children five to ten years old than to spend money on universities 58
- TPO 42 60
- Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, still, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95068493151 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47593029234 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52602739726 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.3359423759 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.071428571 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0714285714 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387583755681 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141770435776 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139200556906 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239852078924 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154342418152 0.0645574589148 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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