Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
It is known that young people are the future of the society. They are responsible for building better communities and making the world better. However, due to their young ages, many decisions are not directly made by them. Therefore, some people hold the view that young people today can't affect those crucial decisions determining the future of the society. Personally, I disagree with this idea because many decision makers are willing to hear advices from the young and young people today have opportunities to make those influencial decisions.
What should be prioritized is that the preference of young people determines the trend, which has already been realized and acknowledged by many decision makers including entrepreneurs and politicians. Therefore, many of them hope to listen to young people's voices when they draw the future blueprint. For example, UNEP has lauched teenager forums every year since 2017, inviting young people from the world to proposing their solutions to the global environmental problems. It's my pleasure to attended once. Many experts and professors listend to our plans attentively and asked several valuable questions about the detailed of our proposal, which give me a feeling of acknowledgement. Thus, I believe that young people have influence on those impacting (far-reaching) decisions.
What should be also mentioned is that young people today have chances to influence the society be themselves. Many countries have given young adults the right to vote for some critical deicision, like determining the next generation of government's officers. I have enacted my right to determine the NPC deputies of my university which is really a valuable experience. What's more, there are many young people today have made brilliant achievements, like owning their own companies or challenging human’s limitaions in the Olympics games and they have directly influenced the society. For instance, it is known the popularity of a sport usually be raised by one or several brilliant athletes. While they achieve their own goals, showing human's fighting spirit, their countries even the world will be motivated so many decisions ranging from personal to national are going to be made to advocate their spirits
To conclude, I believe that young people can influence those decisions influencing the future
- The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone 73
- Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social networking sites Other people prefer not to create such records Which approach do you prefer and why 70
- It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another 73
- When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e mail they will produce better work for the project 90
- The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 285, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...e hold the view that young people today cant affect those crucial decisions determin...
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Line 3, column 476, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...s to the global environmental problems. Its my pleasure to attended once. Many expe...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... which is really a valuable experience. Whats more, there are many young people today...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, really, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42191780822 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82178480868 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53698630137 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7546247896 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.411764706 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385803086746 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134906194942 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992425054233 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284606044879 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578621384929 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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