In the reading passage, the online encyclopedias are found less valuable than the traditional ones, because of several reasons.
First of all, the author argues that the people changing the content online are people who are not academically sufficient to write. On the other hand, the lecturer was disagreeing with the author and explaining her opinion by warning that neither online nor the traditional encyclopedias are perfect. In fact, she supports online encyclopedias by explaining how easier it is to correct the mistakes done in the content, whereas traditional would take decades to fix.
Second, the passage claims that online encyclopedias get damaged by vandals and hackers online. However, the woman in the lecture contrasts, and gives the fact that to change content of these sources online, they need to follow specific instructions, indeed a specific format, so that no one would change in a bad way.
Third, the author concerns about the misguidance of the audience, where not all the online content would be necessary, and in traditional ones they are curated to explain the essential topic. In contrast, the lecturer claims that since traditional encyclopedia writers had limited space, they needed to eliminate some information to present the topic. However, this elimination, she argues, might not reflect a wider perspective. Further, she adds, lots of academic articles are still found online. Lastly, she thinks that diversity of online content is more valuable than the traditional ones.
Overall, the lecturer contrasted the author in the value of online encyclopedia, and explains her reasons why online is a better option than the traditional.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, because of several reasons. First of all, the author argues that the peopl...
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Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... write. On the other hand, the lecturer was disagreeing with the author and explaining her opin...
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Line 5, column 306, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...fic format, so that no one would change in a bad way. Third, the author concerns about t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, second, so, still, third, whereas, in contrast, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 263.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41064638783 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85465500763 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562737642586 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4247699193 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.583333333 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9166666667 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299905068384 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113711547942 0.0996497079465 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564328023849 0.0662205650399 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181834406102 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150821080153 0.0443174109184 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, because of several reasons. First of all, the author argues that the peopl...
^^
Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... write. On the other hand, the lecturer was disagreeing with the author and explaining her opin...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 306, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...fic format, so that no one would change in a bad way. Third, the author concerns about t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, second, so, still, third, whereas, in contrast, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 263.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41064638783 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85465500763 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562737642586 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4247699193 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.583333333 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9166666667 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299905068384 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113711547942 0.0996497079465 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564328023849 0.0662205650399 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181834406102 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150821080153 0.0443174109184 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.