Essay topics: TPO-42 - Integrated Writing TaskGlass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every

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Essay topics: TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task

Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows There are, however, several solutions that responsible businesses can use to prevent injuries to birds.

One-Way Glass

One solution is to replace the regular, clear glass with one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. The occupants of the building can see out, but birds and others cannot see in. If birds cannot see through a window, they will understand that the glass forms a solid barrier and will not try to fly through it.

Colorful Designs

A second solution is to paint colorful lines or other designs on regular window glass. For example, a window could have a design of thin stripes painted over the glass. People would still be able to see through the openings in the design where there is no paint, while birds would see the stripes and thus avoid trying to fly through the glass Architects can be encouraged to include colorful painted patterns on glass as part of the general design of buildings.

Magnetic Field

The third solution is to create an artificial magnetic held to guide birds away from buildings. Humans use an instrument called a magnetic compass to determine directions-either north, south, east, or west. Bird research has shown that birds have a natural ability to sense Earth’s magnetic fields; this ability works just like a compass, and it helps birds navigate in the right direction when they fly. A building in a bird flight path can be equipped with powerful electromagnets that emit magnetic signals that steer birds in a direction away from the building.

The reading passage explaines that, because of the glasses in the building, there are about 1000000 bird, which are died because they try to go through the glasses as a concrete places and they died. So, the reading claims that there is three specific solution which it will help to reducing of these dead birds. But, on the other hand the lecture absolutly disputes this view and declears his view by rejecting of the three reason on the reading.

First, the lecturer claims that the one-way glasses will not help the reducing the gasualties of the birds, because this kind of the glasses are incredibly like the mirror from outside and birds cand recognise this matter and they try to get through them. Furthermore, they thing that the refleces of the sky and the treesa and etc. which are pictured from outside of the glasses, are real and they will go toward them. So, this policy is as bad as the regular glasses.

second, in counter of the reading claim the lecture says that the colorful strips will not work either. Because, between the artifactual strips there must be some holes and spaces to let the light go to the indore of the house and by this spaces, absolutly can not recognize this matter and they will think that these holes are the some place for going through like spaces between the leaves of the trees and tise police either will not work.

Finally, the lecturer is not convienced that the electromagnets and magnetic field can solve this problem. In the opposite side of the reading calims, the lecturer says that the birds just use thier magnetic navigation ability for long distance mgration, like for seasonal huge migration from south to north, and they never, ever use this ability for short distances like goiing to one side of the city to other side.

concluseively It can be siad that the lecture refuses all reasons of the reading passage and he concludes that they are not the correct sentences for this purpose and it is wrong.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...xplaines that, because of the glasses in the building, there are about 1000000 bi...
^^
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'birds'?
Suggestion: birds
... the building, there are about 1000000 bird, which are died because they try to go ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'bird' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'birds'.
Suggestion: birds
... the building, there are about 1000000 bird, which are died because they try to go ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (cand) must be used with a third-person verb: 'recognises'.
Suggestion: recognises
... the mirror from outside and birds cand recognise this matter and they try to get through...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 275, Rule ID: YOU_THING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'think' or 'thinks'?
Suggestion: think; thinks
... to get through them. Furthermore, they thing that the refleces of the sky and the tr...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... the refleces of the sky and the treesa and etc. which are pictured from outside of the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... treesa and etc. which are pictured from outside of the glasses, are real and the...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
...y is as bad as the regular glasses. second, in counter of the reading claim the le...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ht go to the indore of the house and by this spaces, absolutly can not recognize thi...
^^^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...hey will think that these holes are the some place for going through like spaces bet...
^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Concluseively
...one side of the city to other side. concluseively It can be siad that the lecture refuses...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 345.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72463768116 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2310632784 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475362318841 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 489.6 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.8069915933 49.2860985944 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.833333333 110.228320801 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.75 21.698381199 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293049921597 0.272083759551 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982719735823 0.0996497079465 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836441139812 0.0662205650399 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154723705412 0.162205337803 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573690116091 0.0443174109184 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.3589403974 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.0289183223 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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