The writer claims that there are three possible reason to explain the migration hypothesis of the edmontosaurs while the professor expressed different opinions against all these reasons.
Firstly, the writer believes that the demontosaur’s diet supports the migration hypothesis. However, the professor argues that demontosaurs don’t have to migrate to find food since Alaska’s north slope was warmer at that moment which means abundant food plant to eat. By the time winter came, the demontosaurs could eat dead vegetation to survive.
Secondly, the writer holds that many demontosaurs lived in herd so that they migrate to avoid the winter. The professor suggests that living in herd does not mean the migration hypothesis. They lived in herd to get extra protection against the predators. Meanwhile, creature lived in herd like elks doesn’t migrate either.
Lastly, the writer holds that demontosaurs had the capability of migrating long distance. Nevertheless, the professor points out that juveniles in the herd might slow down the herd so that they could not reach their destination. As herd could not let the juvenile alone because that could not survive the in winter, the herd have to stayed there and survive in the winter.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... which means abundant food plant to eat.By the time winter came, the demontosaurs ...
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...o that they migrate to avoid the winter.The professor suggests that living in herd...
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...d the winter.The professor suggests that living in herd does not mean the migrati...
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... does not mean the migration hypothesis.They lived in herd to get extra protection a...
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Suggestion: Meanwhile
... extra protection against the predators.Meanwhile, creature lived in herd like elks doesn...
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... they could not reach their destination.As herd could not let the juvenile alone b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, lastly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 10.4613686534 19% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1067.0 1373.03311258 78% => OK
No of words: 191.0 270.72406181 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58638743455 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13203677191 2.5805825403 121% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 145.348785872 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570680628272 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 419.366225166 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.6778485752 49.2860985944 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.833333333 110.228320801 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8333333333 21.698381199 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06452816374 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0474339544474 0.272083759551 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.024800516015 0.0996497079465 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343897904212 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.028767353853 0.162205337803 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038179200722 0.0443174109184 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 13.3589403974 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 53.8541721854 74% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.2367328918 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 63.6247240618 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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