For today’s middle-aged adults, it would be difficult to imagine life without the internet. For children and younger adults, the internet has always been so universally present that not having it would simply be unimaginable. Clearly, the internet has changed the world, and the nature of knowledge, significantly. But has the internet fundamentally changed people?
According to some experts, the answer is yes—and the reality is dismal. Nicholas Carr, a sociologist who focuses on the effects of technology, says we are increasingly becoming “hunters and gatherers in an electronic forest” rather than “cultivators of personal knowledge and expertise.” The main problem, according to Carr, is that the internet puts other people’s ideas and experiences perpetually at our fingertips—with the result that we have become less adventurous, more cautious, and less likely to define ourselves by our own experiences.
Moreover, as studies have shown, the internet has had adverse effects on our short-term attention spans and our ability to focus on a task. When we work online, we are inundated with hyperlinks, advertisements, animations, sound, and all manner of other distractions from the information that was our original target. Many neuroscientists fear that we may lose our ability to synthesize all this diverse information and to think about its significance. In other words, our capacity for true understanding may be gradually diminishing.
Additionally, as technology journalist Steve Ciarcia points out, the internet often removes the need for critical thinking and creative problem-solving in everyday situations. As Ciarcia says, “It’s only about five seconds before some guy whips out his phone and googles” the solution to an everyday conundrum. As a result, people are less motivated to experiment, less likely to enumerate all available options, and more tempted to make premature decisions.
The reading passage and lecture both talks about the effects of internet in our life. The reading passage implies that internet is making us more dumber. On the contrarary,the proffessor raises dispute against passage’s former claim and asserts that internet is actually help us to develop in more positive manner. Furthermore, she continues that after the emergence of inetrnet, there have been whopping increase in people’s IQ by about 10 points.
The first imperative reason stated in the reading passage is that people aren’t actually expressing their idea. With the plethora of information available on the internet, we are easily influenced by other people’s opinion and has adveresly affected our risk taking abilities. Proffessor on the other hand argues that with the advent of internet, students are now aware of different traditions and cultures being followed accross the globe without actually visiting those places.
The reading passage bolsters its main thesis statement by stating the fact that overusage of internet had diminished people’s capacity to focus and concentrate. The lecturer subscribes to the opposite view point by positing that nowadays there have been significant enhancement in people’s ability to focus on multiple activities simulataneously. She illustrates by the example that about 30 years back, parents used to easily lose their thought process whenever their child distrubed them by crying. But in today’s era, parents are easily able to able to focus back on their work. Therefore, lecturer maintains that people are nowadays multitasking and are able to focus on mutliple things simulataneously.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For most jobs or areas of work understanding the limits of your knowledge is more important than the knowledge you have Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 83
- Organic food is very trendy these days Everywhere you go people are jumping on the organic bandwagon I used to be organic I did But I kicked the habit Believe me I d bought all the arguments like the one that says that organic food is priced the same as n 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reasons and examples to su 85
- Which is more important for a leader the ability to win an argument about an issue or the ability to help others come to an agreement about an issue Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 81
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement My lifestyle is easier and more comfortable than the one my grandparents experienced when they were young Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 142, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'dumber' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: dumber
...sage implies that internet is making us more dumber. On the contrarary,the proffessor raise...
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Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...making us more dumber. On the contrarary,the proffessor raises dispute against passa...
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Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... passage’s former claim and asserts that internet is actually help us to develop ...
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Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'helped'.
Suggestion: helped
... and asserts that internet is actually help us to develop in more positive manner. ...
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Line 3, column 540, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'able to'.
Suggestion: able to
... But in today’s era, parents are easily able to able to focus back on their work. Therefore, le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 252.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5753968254 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88147432851 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587301587302 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3064428658 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.083333333 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 7.06452816374 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127115276983 0.272083759551 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487670343478 0.0996497079465 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377475507346 0.0662205650399 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0887156632221 0.162205337803 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318021776129 0.0443174109184 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 53.8541721854 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.42419426049 116% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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