TOEFL integrated writing: Endotherms
The author states that though dinosaurs are different from reptiles in many ways, there are few arguments that they are rather endotherms and provides three reasons for support. However, the professor explains that many scientists do not quite agree with those arguments and refutes each of the reasons of the author.
Firstly, the reading claims that the dinosaur fossils which were excavated in the polar regions suggest that they lived there. Also, it says that only endotherms are capable of maintaining their body temperatures above the surrounding environment. The professor refutes this point by saying that the fossils found were warm which implied that they lived in polar regions when it was warm. Moreover, she said that it can also be the case that the dinosaurs migrated during the cold days or even hibernated.
Secondly, the author posits that there's a link between the position and movement of the legs and endotherms. It is said that all of the endotherms have legs placed underneath their body which was a characteristic seen in the dinosaurs. However, the professor explains that there can be another reason for having such a leg position, for example, it helps to support the weight of the dinosaurs. According to the professor, due to such physiology dinosaurs can grow bigger in size and it has nothing to do with their physical activity like running.
Thirdly, the reading states that dinosaur's bone structures consisted of Haversian canals, which was common in all endotherms, to allow them to grow rapidly. The professor opposes this point by saying that though they did have Haversian canals they also had growth rings that occurred due to the thickening of the bone during the periods when they are growing slowly. We also learn that there was a pattern of rapid growth and slow or no growth, at times of cold periods, observed in dinosaurs. She brings out the fact that this is not something we see in the case of endotherms rather they can grow rapidly even when the environment is cooler.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 34, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
.... Secondly, the author posits that theres a link between the position and movemen...
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Line 9, column 126, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...he legs and endotherms. It is said that all of the endotherms have legs placed underneath ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 466, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: bigger
...e to such physiology dinosaurs can grow bigger in size and it has nothing to do with their phy...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 12.0772626932 207% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 22.412803532 192% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1373.03311258 123% => OK
No of words: 339.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54229372184 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504424778761 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.9091820459 49.2860985944 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 121.071428571 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 7.06452816374 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0475566835189 0.272083759551 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0199257242478 0.0996497079465 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317412936068 0.0662205650399 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0317666680613 0.162205337803 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.006273862361 0.0443174109184 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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