TOEFL Integrated writing topic - Claudius of Rome
The reading states that the emperor Claudius of Rome was of great importance to the history of ancient European civilization and rates him as among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Roman history. However, the professor casts doubt on the reading and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading states that Claudius was responsible for major innovations such as harbor for Rome and several new aqueducts that brought clean water into the city. The professor refutes this point by stating that these constructions came at a great cost of an army after the assassination of the previous emperor. Moreover, he states that this behavior of Claudius plunged Rome into the civil war.
Second, the article avers that Claudius was fair enough as he created laws to protect the rights of slaves and expand Roman citizenship to new people. However, the professor contends that Claudius was notoriously a bad judge as he never listened to both sides. Moreover, he loved violent gladiator games and once executed a thousand men just for fun. Also, the professor mentions that conquering Britain was his indigenous behavior.
Finally, the reading states that Claudius illustrated his wisdom by giving high bureaucratic positions to salves and women. The professor opposes this point by stating that all selected slaves were corrupt and subject to bribery. Also, he states that his wives were murderers. Moreover, his last wife poisoned him to see her son as the emperor. The professor condemns that his son later proved to be the worst emperor in history.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1320.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 257.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13618677043 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58921861795 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552529182879 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4199726736 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2857142857 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 7.06452816374 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100900979916 0.272083759551 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365384867796 0.0996497079465 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469507157022 0.0662205650399 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0682240604609 0.162205337803 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337218307791 0.0443174109184 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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