Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote.
Voting is one of the most essential rights of any citizen in a democratic country. Considering the rapid technological advancements which bring effective psychological and physical changes to a child at an early age, I believe age should not be a hindrance for voting. In my opinion, children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote.
Firstly, the rapid advancements in the field of media and the internet have brought revolutionary changes in the life of young children. They are becoming more and more aware of their constitution. Moreover, due to the knowledge gained from the internet, it's very easy for them to identify the social concerns in their constituency. They now can easily make out the difference between a good and a bad candidate. For eg, I remember a few months back when there were assembly elections in my country, I was shocked to listen to one of my cousins of age 16. He was able to list down all the concerns in our society along with how the contending candidates have fared out from their previous elections. Hence, due to this display of maturity by children above 15 years, they should be allowed to vote.
Secondly, children from ages 15 to 18 form a major part of the entire population. Hence, if they aren't allowed to vote then the elected government would not be a correct representation of the entire population. Also, we all know these children are the ones who will shape the future of the country. Hence, deciding upon the good or bad candidate will make them more responsible and strong in decision-making. For eg. in my country around 40% of the youth population lies under the age of 15 to 18. And, the minimum age to vote is 18, so the elected government is only the voice of the rest 60%. Also, in my country as per the statistics released by the children welfare department show that this 40 % of the children between 15 and 18 years are psychologically strong enough to vote.
Lastly, I would say that these young children are the driving force of the success of the country. Also, as the rapid communication advancements make thinking of the children bold enough to decide between good and bad and as these children form a major part of the population, I believe children above 15 years of age must be allowed to vote.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: aren't
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Message: Did you mean 'voting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: voting
...opulation. Hence, if they arent allowed to vote then the elected government would not b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68329177057 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81538855446 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498753117207 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0405720971 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8421052632 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1052631579 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289724032046 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931645673866 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116905462287 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204341395365 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684575934336 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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