TOEFL Official Guide - Practice Test 2 - Integrated Writing - Professors on TV

The professors are the profesionals who have obtained great reputation in academic environment. Their activity vitally impacts the social progress and opens to new talented students the door to their future career by providing them with high education and scientific knowledge. Although some people think that professors appearance on TV can bring many benefits, there are some reasonable points from the lecture that lack of stakeholders can succeed from this.

The passage is about three categories of people who have advantages from professors celebrities. First, professors themselves can gain the success and the reputation from TV shows. However the lecturer told that professionals who often appear on TV do not have serious reputation among colleagues. It is likely to them that they have scarcity of funding or do not conduct research. Moreover, the time what professors could spend on solving scientific problems or teaching youngsters, is wasting for the preparations to the topic presentation, commuting or even TV show rehearsals.

The next group is public, who could benefit from professors explanations on television. Although a wide range of people can be interested in science, experts on TV should provide their viewers with brief materials without profound explanation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ation and scientific knowledge. Although some people think that professors appear...
^^
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...ledge. Although some people think that professors appearance on TV can bring many benefit...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ccess and the reputation from TV shows. However the lecturer told that professionals wh...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1098.0 1373.03311258 80% => OK
No of words: 197.0 270.72406181 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57360406091 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01185098575 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644670050761 0.540411800872 119% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 419.366225166 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2284976005 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.8 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 7.06452816374 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121800122998 0.272083759551 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05238196658 0.0996497079465 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335278697649 0.0662205650399 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0847882947524 0.162205337803 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238151618291 0.0443174109184 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.42419426049 114% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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