TPO-04 - Integrated Writing Task Endotherms are animals such as modern birds and mammals that keep their body temperatures constant. For instance, humans are endotherms and maintain an internal temperature of 37°C, no matter whether the environment is wa

In the passage the author suggests that dinosaurs are endotherms as the posses many characteristics of endotherm animals. However, the lecturer is not convinced with the arguments in the text. He points out many reasons for which dinosaurs can not be considered as endotherms.

Author in the text describes the habitat of dinosaurs in the polar region, where they need to maintain a higher body temperature due to cold. But the speaker highlights that the polar regions were much warmer in past than today, so dinosaur doesn't need to maintain such high temperature in polar region,moreover in the cold days they might be moving to a warmer place.As they didn't not maintain the high body temperature they were not endotherms.

Additionally the author finds a connection between the leg position and the endothermy,stating if legs are below the body it enables the endotherms with physiology. The lecturer snubs this claim right away suggesting although the legs of dinosaurs were underneath body, it was just to support it massive size.It has nothing to do with endothermy.

Finally the lecturer points out that even though dinosaurs bones contained haversian cannals, which is a common property of endotherms as per the text they were not endotherms. This is because dinosaurs aslo contained growth rings in their bones which indicates that they can not have steady growth. Endotherms always have a steady growth, So dinosaurs can not be considered as endotherm.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 228.0 270.72406181 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40789473684 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18179007614 2.5805825403 123% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535087719298 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 370.8 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 21.2450331126 212% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.517809797 49.2860985944 236% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 246.6 110.228320801 224% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.6 21.698381199 210% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 4.19205298013 453% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436296105911 0.272083759551 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.235934868227 0.0996497079465 237% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0100836525075 0.0662205650399 15% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250169903424 0.162205337803 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249193214449 0.0443174109184 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.9 13.3589403974 201% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 25.8 53.8541721854 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 11.0289183223 189% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.99 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.42419426049 117% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.7273730684 266% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.498013245 191% => OK
text_standard: 29.0 11.2008830022 259% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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In the passage the author suggests that dinosaurs are endotherms as the posses many characteristics of endotherm animals. However, the lecturer is not convinced with the arguments in the text. He points out many reasons for which dinosaurs can not be considered as endotherms.

Author in the text describes the habitat of dinosaurs in the polar region, where they need to maintain a higher body temperature due to cold. But the speaker highlights that the polar regions were much warmer in past than today, so dinosaur doesn't need to maintain such high temperature in polar region,moreover in the cold days they might be moving to a warmer place.As they didn't not maintain the high body temperature they were not endotherms.

Additionally the author finds a connection between the leg position and the endothermy,stating if legs are below the body it enables the endotherms with physiology. The lecturer snubs this claim right away suggesting although the legs of dinosaurs were underneath body, it was just to support it massive size.It has nothing to do with endothermy.

Finally the lecturer points out that even though dinosaurs bones contained haversian cannals, which is a common property of endotherms as per the text they were not endotherms. This is because dinosaurs aslo contained growth rings in their bones which indicates that they can not have steady growth. Endotherms always have a steady growth, So dinosaurs can not be considered as endotherm.