Both the reading passage and the lecture discuss the causes of declining of yellow cedar trees in north America.The reading provides tree reason of declining yellew cedr trees such as insect parasites,brown bear,and climate change.However,the professor refutes each of the author's reasons.
The reading states that insect parasite such as Cedarbark beetle is responsible for declining of yellow cedar trees .On the other hand, the professor oppose this point by stating that yellow cedar is resistent to these species as they create powerful chemical substance that kill these insects .Bettles are only atttack sick or dead trees .As a consequence, the beetles are not responsible of decreasing yellow cedar trees.
secondly, the reading claims that brown bears are the cause of declining yellow-cedar trees as they claw and eat the threes because the trunk of these trees contains high amount of sugar.Nevertheless,the otar couteracts this point by explaing that in some areas other than north America ,there is declining of yellow cedar trees however, ther is no brown bears in this areas.Thereby, the brown bears are not related to the decline.
Finally, the passage states that the gradual change of climate is the reason of declining. The professor refutes this idea by giving an example of the yellow cedar trees died in the warm climates, although in some freezing areas ,there is no declining of the trees.
As shown, the lecture refutes each of the author's points.
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Essay evaluation report
The reading provides tree reason
The reading provides three reasons
the professor oppose this point
the professor opposes this point
Bettles are only atttack sick or dead trees
Bettles only attack sick or dead trees
Sentence: there is declining of yellow cedar trees however, ther is no brown bears in this areas.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and areas
Sentence: The reading states that insect parasite such as Cedarbark beetle is responsible for declining of yellow cedar trees .On the other hand, the professor oppose this point by stating that yellow cedar is resistent to these species as they create powerful chemical substance that kill these insects .Bettles are only atttack sick or dead trees .As a consequence, the beetles are not responsible of decreasing yellow cedar trees.
Error: atttack Suggestion: attack
Error: resistent Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: secondly, the reading claims that brown bears are the cause of declining yellow-cedar trees as they claw and eat the threes because the trunk of these trees contains high amount of sugar.Nevertheless,the otar couteracts this point by explaing that in some areas other than north America ,there is declining of yellow cedar trees however, ther is no brown bears in this areas.Thereby, the brown bears are not related to the decline.
Error: explaing Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: ther Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: couteracts Suggestion: contracts
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
Don't put a space before punctuation marks.
Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.
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Don't need a conclusion paragraph. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 19 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 6 12
No. of Words: 245 250
No. of Characters: 1208 1200
No. of Different Words: 117 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.956 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.931 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.317 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 40.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.464 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.527 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.793 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... of yellow cedar trees in north America.The reading provides tree reason of declini...
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Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , brown
...llew cedr trees such as insect parasites,brown bear,and climate change.However,the pro...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...rees such as insect parasites,brown bear,and climate change.However,the professor re...
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Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...parasites,brown bear,and climate change.However,the professor refutes each of the autho...
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Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...es,brown bear,and climate change.However,the professor refutes each of the authors r...
^^^^
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ible for declining of yellow cedar trees .On the other hand, the professor oppose ...
^^
Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
...le for declining of yellow cedar trees .On the other hand, the professor oppose th...
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Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...emical substance that kill these insects .Bettles are only atttack sick or dead tr...
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Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Bettles
...ical substance that kill these insects .Bettles are only atttack sick or dead trees .As...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tles are only atttack sick or dead trees .As a consequence, the beetles are not re...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...es are only atttack sick or dead trees .As a consequence, the beetles are not resp...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ible of decreasing yellow cedar trees. secondly, the reading claims that brown ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...e of decreasing yellow cedar trees. secondly, the reading claims that brown bears ar...
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Line 5, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he cause of declining yellow-cedar trees as they claw and eat the threes because ...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Nevertheless
...ese trees contains high amount of sugar.Nevertheless,the otar couteracts this point by expla...
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Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ntains high amount of sugar.Nevertheless,the otar couteracts this point by explaing ...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t in some areas other than north America ,there is declining of yellow cedar trees...
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Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...rees however, ther is no brown bears in this areas.Thereby, the brown bears are not ...
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Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thereby
...r, ther is no brown bears in this areas.Thereby, the brown bears are not related to the...
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Line 7, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... gradual change of climate is the reason of declining. The professor refutes this...
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Line 7, column 230, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...limates, although in some freezing areas ,there is no declining of the trees. As ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'however', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.275862068966 0.261695866417 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.157088122605 0.158904122519 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.11877394636 0.0723426182421 164% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0268199233716 0.0435111971325 62% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00766283524904 0.0277247811725 28% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.141762452107 0.128828473217 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0498084291188 0.0370669169778 134% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.86421135235 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00766283524904 0.0208969081088 37% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.157088122605 0.128158765124 123% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0158828679856 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00383141762452 0.0114777025283 33% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1482.0 1645.83664459 90% => OK
No of words: 237.0 271.125827815 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.25316455696 6.08160592843 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.04852973271 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396624472574 0.374372842146 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282700421941 0.287516216867 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168776371308 0.187439937562 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10970464135 0.113142543107 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86421135235 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497890295359 0.539623497131 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.5539257401 53.8517498576 85% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0529801325 46% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 39.5 21.7502111507 182% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 148.709635046 49.3711431718 301% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 247.0 132.220823453 187% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 39.5 21.7502111507 182% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 0.878197800319 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 3.39072847682 619% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 67.7700421941 50.5018328374 134% => OK
Elegance: 2.44 1.90840788429 128% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.711414284736 0.549887131256 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.299100252553 0.142949733639 209% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0665670775795 0.0787303798458 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.937842016836 0.631733273073 148% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0982257250328 0.139662658121 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.49954055014 0.266732575781 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079972920099 0.103435571967 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.450109917924 0.414875509568 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0905071271039 0.0530846634433 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.516586441115 0.40443939384 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973754028098 0.0528353158467 184% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.26048565121 70% => OK
Positive topic words: 0.0 3.49668874172 0% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.1766004415 94% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 10.2958057395 58% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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