TPO 28 - Integrated Writing Task

The issue both reading and the listening focus on is Peary’s claim of reaching the North Pole, but the listening casts doubt at three main points.

At the first point, the reading states that an investigation was organized by the National Geographic Society. The investigation concluded that Peary’s accounts were consistent and persuasive. According to the listening, the society was comprised of Peary’s close friends who had contributed to Peary’s expedition. Furthermore, the investigation only lasted two days, so it is not fully objective.

At the second point, the reading mentions that recent expedition by Tom Avery supported Peary’s claim of reaching the North Pole in 37 days. Avery finished his expedition in less than 37 days, using the same doglsed kind and dog breed. However, the listening claims that the circumstances for Avery’s expedition were different from Peary’s. He had to carry less weight, since food was dropped from the sky. Also, the weather condition for Avery was better. Thus, Avery’s expedition was too different to support Peary’s claim.

At the third point, the reading believed that photographs taken by Peary contribute to his claim. Measurement of shadow for these photographs helps to calculate the Sun’s position, which corresponds to where it should have been. On the contrary, the listening confirms that Peary’s photographs were too fuzzy and unfocused. Because establishing the Sun’s position needs precision, the position of the Sun cannot be calculated.

Votes
Average: 8.8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: WAS_COMPRISED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprised' or 'consisted of' or 'was composed of'?
Suggestion: comprised; consisted of; was composed of
...According to the listening, the society was comprised of Peary's close friends who had cont...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, third, thus, as to, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 235.0 270.72406181 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68936170213 5.08290768461 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16953012785 2.5805825403 123% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578723404255 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1776901506 49.2860985944 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.1333333333 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 21.698381199 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403914601863 0.272083759551 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144584748966 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868658520508 0.0662205650399 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250865879131 0.162205337803 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587889261854 0.0443174109184 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.2367328918 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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