TPO-32 - Integrated Writing Task Starting in the 1960s and continuing until the 1980s, sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the North Alantic and Arctic Ocean would occasionally hear strange sounds. These underwater noises reminded the submarine crews

The both reading and the lecture discuss about the frog croak from the sea. The reading says that three theory about the bizarre sound. The lecture refutes these theory which introduced in the reading passage.

First of all, the reading states that the sound could be from Ocra whale because in order to attract the male whale the uses this kind of sound for matting and it is common for animal those lives in this area. However, the lecture refuses this view by saying that even though it makes this strange sound, it never lives in the deep sea area-they use to live surface water of the ocean. Moreover, it is easy to find out it's sound by sonar equipments.

Secondly, the passage claims that giant squids may be made this sound because it is invertebrate but it has ability and intelligence to produce such kind of sound. But, the professor opposes this point by stating that, In 1960 they sound has been produced and continued for few decade and stopped, then started on 1980. Further, he says that this creature still lives in this are and it is not disappear anymore. Why this intermittent sound appearance?.He raising the doubt.

Thirdly, reading suggests that some foreign country uses the new technology which cannot be detected by sonar system. Still, the speaker reputes this statement by explaining that in order to do so the marine ships must has ability to turn course of journey quickly which highly impossible. Plus, engine noise will be very sound, in addition to that, there is technology to keep engine silent so far.

To sum up, the reading suggests some theories such as Ocra whale use different sound to attract male, giant squids ability to make this distinctive sound and foreign country ship's new technology could the reason for this frog croak. But, the speaker refutes all these points by stating some evidences.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t three theory about the bizarre sound. The lecture refutes these theory which intr...
^^^
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this theory' or 'these theories'?
Suggestion: this theory; these theories
... the bizarre sound. The lecture refutes these theory which introduced in the reading passage...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...t never lives in the deep sea area-they use to live surface water of the ocean. Mor...
^^^
Line 6, column 275, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun decade seems to be countable; consider using: 'few decades'.
Suggestion: few decades
...und has been produced and continued for few decade and stopped, then started on 1980. Furt...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 395, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disappeared'.
Suggestion: disappeared
...e still lives in this are and it is not disappear anymore. Why this intermittent sound ap...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 454, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...Why this intermittent sound appearance?.He raising the doubt. Thirdly, readi...
^^
Line 11, column 109, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'squids'' or 'squid's'?
Suggestion: squids'; squid's
... different sound to attract male, giant squids ability to make this distinctive sound ...
^^^^^^
Line 11, column 303, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...these points by stating some evidences.
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, in addition, kind of, such as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 317.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85804416404 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28399445621 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533123028391 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2350622141 49.2860985944 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.666666667 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06452816374 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258610653635 0.272083759551 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951105106943 0.0996497079465 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634583113602 0.0662205650399 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153774684208 0.162205337803 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504756762734 0.0443174109184 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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