TPO 35 Integrated Writing Task

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TPO 35 Integrated Writing Task

The reading passage explains three possible theories about the author of Voynich manuscript. However, in the lecture the professor respectively contradicts all the assertions by using three specific points as supports.

At first, the idea of Anatony Ascham was the author of this mysterious manuscript due to the analogues between scientific information of Voynich with those in Ascham's medicine book. While the lecturer points out the fact that people on the era of Anthony was too illiterate to understand the content of his book. So, he had no need to encode his book and he is highly unlikely to be the writer of the Voynich.

Secondly, the reading mentiones that Edward Kelley who pretend to have magic power for deceiving people made a fake book to get money from them. On the other hand, the professor repudiates this idea by saying that people on that time are too simple to need so much effort for cheating them.

Finally, although the reading passage claims that Wlfrid as a big dealer of antique material might created the fake manuscript to attract the attention of people who hd passion into ancient things, But the professor states that the survey on the age og ink of manuscript shows that he lived many years after the creation of this book and the ink is older than his time.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ch with those in Aschams medicine book. While the lecturer points out the fact that p...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a hd'.
Suggestion: who is a hd
...ript to attract the attention of people who hd passion into ancient things, But the pr...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (og) must be used with a third-person verb: 'inks'.
Suggestion: inks
...or states that the survey on the age og ink of manuscript shows that he lived many...
^^^
Line 7, column 291, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...og ink of manuscript shows that he lived many years after the creation of this bo...
^^
Line 7, column 372, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ook and the ink is older than his time.
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, as to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1079.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 223.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83856502242 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47830782845 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 145.348785872 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605381165919 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 327.6 419.366225166 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.5657488149 49.2860985944 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.875 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.875 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.875 7.06452816374 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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