TPO 40 - Integrated Writing Task

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TPO 40 - Integrated Writing Task

In the passage, it is thought to be truth that human presence on Venus would be impossible because of several problems. In contrast, the professor holds a contradictory view that something can be done to solve all the problems which is to build a floating station on Venus.

First of all, it is presented in the passage that there is such great atmosphere on Venus that every spacecraft which tried to land on the Venus has been crashed. Notwithstanding, the professor puts forth that the construction of floating station can make it possible to face less pressure which is at the similar level to the pressure on Earth since there will be less atmosphere pressure when floating above the land. That is to say, living there will be kind of possible.

Secondly, it is proposed that there is not the presence of reservoirs that which is what people need to keep alive. Nevertheless, the professor says that since there are many elements like carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric acid in the atmosphere of Venus, people can utilize those elements to make what they need like drinkable water and stuff like that. As a result water supply will no longer be listed in problems.

Thirdly, limited sunlight is considered to be one of the obstacles that prevent people from living there for the atmosphere is very thick on Venus. Whereas, the professor comes up with plausible aspects that when high up in the sky at 50 kilometers, the atmosphere is indeed not that thick and the gaining sunlight is possible there. Plus, people can also receive the reflection of the sunlight. In a word, it is possible to receive the sunlight both above and beneath. Consequently, there is no need to worry about the problem of the lack of sunlight.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... Secondly, it is proposed that there is no the presence of reservoirs that which i...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, whereas, in contrast, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1267.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 259.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89189189189 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66575964857 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 145.348785872 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505791505792 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 389.7 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0868234565 49.2860985944 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.7 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9 21.698381199 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.9 7.06452816374 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29857582896 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11211240921 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596342471847 0.0662205650399 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17116446715 0.162205337803 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470911310167 0.0443174109184 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 63.6247240618 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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