TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

Based on the reading conditions on Venus are not appropriate to establish human living on it. The article provides three reasons to support it. However, the lecturer explains that none of the reasons are true and refutes each of the author's reasons.

The author argues that atmospheric pressure at Venus surface is so higher than the pressure on Earth, so humans whom might land on Venus will be crushed under this high pressure. In contrast, the lecturer demonstrates that pressure has a direct connection with height. By going to higher elevations on Venus, the pressure will be lower. So we can establish a balloon-like shape around the Venus about 50 kilometers upper of the Venus surface. In this elevation atmospheric pressure is adequate to human. As a result, the contribution that the author explained seems to be really dubious.

Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that there are not enough water and oxygen on Venus' surface and transferring these elements from Earth to Venus will not be a practical solution. Nevertheless, the lecturer illustrates that Venus' surface contains a high amount of carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid and these elements can change to water and oxygen by chemical processes. Therefore, the low amount of water and oxygen supplies would not be a considerable problem.

Finally, the reading asserts that the sunlight on the Venus surface is to low to make electricity. The lecturer opposes this point by proposing a solution. She claims that above the 50 kilometers the sunlight is proper to make electricity. Moreover, she suggests using reflected sunlight by clouds to produce more electricity. Consequently, this claim does not possess a strong support in order to be acceptable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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...at the sunlight on the Venus surface is to low to make electricity. The lecturer o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, furthermore, however, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, in contrast, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18861209964 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84662364379 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516014234875 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8017882755 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7647058824 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5294117647 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376496941474 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106514776597 0.0996497079465 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864344164601 0.0662205650399 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193249851175 0.162205337803 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106751683368 0.0443174109184 241% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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