The amount of time that young people should spend in helping their communities has always been a controversial issue among sociologists. While some people believe that young people should spend more time to help their communities, there are others holding the view that young people should spend their time to improve their own skills. As far as I am concerned, young people do not pay enough attention to their communities these days. I will vindicate my standpoint in the following article.
The first reason that juts out of the mind is the fact that young people are busier these days than they were in the past. Young people are busy now with their university chores more than the past. For example, they should write a paper for every class that they take each semester. Writing an essay needs a lot of time, for searching about the issue and finding the sources, studying sources, coming to a conclusion and writing the essay. Moreover, they spend a lot of time to study for their exams. These days professors assign more sources for final exams such as; textbooks and websites. Therefore, students should spend much more time to be prepared for the final exams. Consequently, these factors make young people busier than they were in the past, and no extra time remains for spending on helping their communities.
The second reason that is worth considering is the fact that the entertainments such as video games are much more than they were in the past. Moreover, spending time playing games is more joyful for young people. Accordingly, young people prefer to spend their leisure time playing video games, instead of helping their community. An example can shed some light on this issue. Imagine a 20 years old young man which spends much of his day in university classes and doing house chores. He will be more interested to spend rest of his day in playing joyful video games with his friends after a boring day, instead of spending time on helping his community which will make him more bored. Accordingly, young people will not give any time to helping their communities, for young people prefer spending time on issues that they find more interesting.
To make a long story short, young people spend less time nowadays to help their communities. That's due to the reason that young people prefer to spend their time on issues that they find more important or more cheerful. All in all, young people should get aware of the importance of their communities and spend some time to help it.
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- TPO 35 writing 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 94, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ime nowadays to help their communities. Thats due to the reason that young people pre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84651162791 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38910452753 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437209302326 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9011035575 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7272727273 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249924044141 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975447670553 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664290702868 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19144124149 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454878550829 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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