TPO-43 - Integrated Writing Task
Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitive arthropods-relatives of modern-day insects. However, the fossil information does not allow paleontologists to determine with certainty what agnostids ate or how they behaved. There are several different theories about how agnostids may have lived.
Free-Swimming Predators
First, the agnostids may have been free-swimming predators that hunted smaller animals. It is known that other types of primitive arthropods were strong swimmers and active predators, so it is reasonable that the agnostids may have lived that way as well And while the agnostids were small, sometimes just six millimeters long, there were plenty of smaller organisms in the ancient ocean for them to prey on.
Seafloor Dwellers
Second, they may have dwelled on the seafloor. Again, there are examples of other types of primitive arthropods living this way, so it is possible that agnostids did too. On the seafloor they would have survived by scavenging dead organisms or by grazing on bacteria.
Parasites
Third, there is the possibility that the agnostids were parasites, living on and feeding off larger organisms. One reason that this seems possible is that there are many species of modern-day arthropods that exist as parasites, such as fleas, ticks, and mites. The agnostids might have lived on primitive fish or even on other, larger arthropods.
Agnostids, a group of animal which has been extinxted approximately about 450 million years ago, is the tpic of both reading and lecture. While the writter suggests some theories of how this animals lived, the lecturer will makes some arguments about how this assumptions and theories are not correct, which will be discribed hereunder.
First, the writter asserts that due to similarlity betwwen the primitive arthropods which were great swimmers and active predators, agnostids are believed to be free-swimming predators. Which can be infernced that they could have eaten small organsims that inhabited in ocean. On the conterary the professor conduct with the idea, owing to predaorts in open oceans should have well developed eyes while these animals have had small, tiny eyes and even some of them were blind. Moreover,she believs that for being a predator some other sence should have developed which there aren't such a kind of sence being observed in these animals.
Second, the reading make some assertion about they may have been seefloor dwellers because of the same reasoning about liken among them and the primitive ones. In addition that they could have survived by eating dead organsims or by gazing on bacteria. On the other side, the professor claims that for such a charectrastics they should have been located in small regions but evidences shows the opposite one by finding documents that they were scatter through diverse lakes and oceans.
Utterly, the reading claims that they were parasites which can be concluded that they lived on larger organism. This claim has been made due to some modern arthropods namely , fleas and tricks which live this way. On the other hand, the lecturer firmly believes that such a animals should lived in small population while there have been som discovering of so many fossiles where occupied a small location.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, moreover, second, so, well, while, even so, in addition, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 304.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14802631579 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48022330834 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555921052632 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.911751098 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.416666667 110.228320801 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352814496695 0.272083759551 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126876993247 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459840121693 0.0662205650399 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20080640968 0.162205337803 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642706655769 0.0443174109184 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.3589403974 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.