TPO-45 - Integrated Writing Task Any student of paleontology will be struck by the fact that a great many animals of the past were considerably larger than they are today. This holds true for species ranging from dinosaurs to most mammals. Just why they w

The reading and listening are both about existing of bees in 200 millions years ago.The author of reading declares that bees did not exist because any fossil of bees have not been discoverd.The lecture casts doubt on the claims made in the article.He thinks that it is not perfect reason to repudiate of bees existing.
firstly,Although author of reading claims that incipient fossil of bees belong to 100milion years old,The professor counters that argument by asserting that trees release a liquid matter that cause to omit fossil consequently bees could not preserve them.
Therefor,While the reading mentions that there is tightly relationship between flowering plants and bees.Bees feed on flowering plants and these plants revealed on earth 125milions years ago,thats why bees could not live 200 million years ago.The lecturer insist that the bees could feed on nonflowering plants such as pintry and fens and when flowering plants was evolved they change their food form nonflowering plants to flowering plants.
The last but not least,In contrast to reading ,which claims that fossilize structures disclosed are similar to nest chamber constructed by modern bees.The lecture states that these chambers are made by chemical material which are water proof.on the other hand, there were some water proof material in fossilize structure.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: The
...sting of bees in 200 millions years ago.The author of reading declares that bees di...
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... fossil of bees have not been discoverd.The lecture casts doubt on the claims made ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... fossil of bees have not been discoverd.The lecture casts doubt on the claims made ...
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Suggestion: He
...doubt on the claims made in the article.He thinks that it is not perfect reason t...
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...laims made in the article.He thinks that it is not perfect reason to repudiate of...
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Suggestion: Firstly
... reason to repudiate of bees existing. firstly,Although author of reading claims that ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Although
... to repudiate of bees existing. firstly,Although author of reading claims that incipient...
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...il of bees belong to 100milion years old,The professor counters that argument by ass...
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... bees could not preserve them. Therefor,While the reading mentions that there is tigh...
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Suggestion: Bees
...nship between flowering plants and bees.Bees feed on flowering plants and these plan...
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...s revealed on earth 125milions years ago,thats why bees could not live 200 million yea...
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... revealed on earth 125milions years ago,thats why bees could not live 200 million yea...
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...es could not live 200 million years ago.The lecturer insist that the bees could fee...
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Suggestion: insists
...live 200 million years ago.The lecturer insist that the bees could feed on nonflowerin...
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...e their food form nonflowering plants to flowering plants. The last but not leas...
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...lowering plants. The last but not least,In contrast to reading ,which claims that ...
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...ast but not least,In contrast to reading ,which claims that fossilize structures d...
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Suggestion: The
...nest chamber constructed by modern bees.The lecture states that these chambers are ...
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Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nest chamber constructed by modern bees.The lecture states that these chambers are ...
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Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...are made by chemical material which are water proof.on the other hand, there were some wate...
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Line 4, column 277, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...roof.on the other hand, there were some water proof material in fossilize structure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, so, while, in contrast, such as, in contrast to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1136.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 209.0 270.72406181 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43540669856 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66146578135 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 145.348785872 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593301435407 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 419.366225166 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 52.0 21.2450331126 245% => Sentence length is too long
Sentence length SD: 67.6364361864 49.2860985944 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 284.0 110.228320801 258% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.25 21.698381199 241% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.25 7.06452816374 357% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 4.19205298013 501% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0439774564889 0.272083759551 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243268189748 0.0996497079465 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0198139849844 0.0662205650399 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0243268189748 0.162205337803 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198139849844 0.0443174109184 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.3 13.3589403974 227% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 27.16 53.8541721854 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 11.0289183223 203% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.16 12.2367328918 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.3 8.42419426049 122% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.498013245 217% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 23.0 11.2008830022 205% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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