tpo 46

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tpo 46

Submitted by Tarokh on Mon, 10/28/2019 - 14:32

The article and the lecturer discuss the advantages of using electronic medical databases over paper-based ones. Albeit the article asserts electronic databases are way better than paper-based ones, the lecturer has uncertainty about the article's claims.

Firstly, the article demonstrates doctors can exploit from cost-efficiency superiority while the lecturer argues that the cost of paper works are meager. More than that, because of the authority's laws, doctors must have paper documents of the patients that are contained the patient's signature.

Moreover, the article believes electronic data will prevent hand-writing errors while the professor illustrates that it will not happens. The professor suggests that electronic data usually are assembled by employees; therefore, doctors will not abandon papers.

Last but not the least, the article shows researches could be benefited by accessing vast numbers pieces of data. Nonetheless, the lecturer believes that due the privacy law which prohibits any usage of personal data of patients without their permission, researchers could not access data easily. Consequently, they have to go through a complex path to reach data that they require.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
... of the patients that are contained the patients signature. Moreover, the article beli...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'happen'?
Suggestion: happen
... professor illustrates that it will not happens. The professor suggests that electronic...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'happen'
Suggestion: happen
... professor illustrates that it will not happens. The professor suggests that electronic...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, moreover, nonetheless, so, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 30.3222958057 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1030.0 1373.03311258 75% => OK
No of words: 177.0 270.72406181 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81920903955 5.08290768461 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 4.04702891845 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85334786702 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 145.348785872 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621468926554 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 317.7 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.1651922208 49.2860985944 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.444444444 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268687052876 0.272083759551 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110388474218 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539351766819 0.0662205650399 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148779575602 0.162205337803 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430747521672 0.0443174109184 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 53.8541721854 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.2367328918 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.11 8.42419426049 120% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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