TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The reading and the speaker discussing the electronic medical report significant but in very contrast ways.

Firstly, reading passage says the it will reduce the cost since it occupies less storage areas but the paper records required lot of space to sore it. Further, it is used to access for the doctors who want to have medical records and transforming and sending fax, coping are very easier. But, the lecture refutes this point by saying that even though when we made things in electronic form still the paper record is must for the legal purposes and backup and to verify the signature.

Secondly, reading states that it can reduces the errors like manual hand writing and spelling mistakes because it consists of standard font size and format. Still, the speaker refuses this point by stating that the doctors are writing while taking physical examination of the patient, while entering these data by the medical staff hand written data that mistakes are unavoidable .

Finally, reading claims that it is helpful for who do the researcher on certain topics because it easy to get more information the system they need not to go for all paper records, it cost much time whereas electronic records gives all information at anyplace. Again, the professor opposes this point by explaining that all the medical records comes under the privacy policy then, it need a lot of permission from the authority including patients. If, the patient selecting the option of block the information it become more difficulty to access the patient records.

To sum up, Reading suggests that electronic records may be more beneficial because it cost less money, reduces the errors and useful for the researchers but the speaker refutes all these points with reasonable arguments .

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
... ways. Firstly, reading passage says the it will reduce the cost since it occupies ...
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Line 5, column 38, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
... Secondly, reading states that it can reduces the errors like manual hand writing and...
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Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing physical examination of the patient, while entering these data by the medical...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...taff hand written data that mistakes are unavoidable . Finally, reading claims...
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Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tten data that mistakes are unavoidable . Finally, reading claims that it is h...
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Line 7, column 48, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
..., reading claims that it is helpful for who do the researcher on certain topics bec...
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Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'go'?
Suggestion: go
...re information the system they need not to go for all paper records, it cost much tim...
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Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'records'' or 'record's'?
Suggestion: records'; record's
...oint by explaining that all the medical records comes under the privacy policy then, it...
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Line 7, column 449, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... from the authority including patients. If, the patient selecting the option of bl...
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Line 7, column 514, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
... the option of block the information it become more difficulty to access the patient r...
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Line 9, column 220, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...l these points with reasonable arguments .
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'whereas', 'while', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253968253968 0.261695866417 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.168253968254 0.158904122519 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0825396825397 0.0723426182421 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0444444444444 0.0435111971325 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0444444444444 0.0277247811725 160% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114285714286 0.128828473217 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0603174603175 0.0370669169778 163% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47645201711 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0253968253968 0.0208969081088 122% => OK
Particles: 0.0031746031746 0.00154638098197 205% => OK
Determiners: 0.11746031746 0.128158765124 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0126984126984 0.0158828679856 80% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0126984126984 0.0114777025283 111% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1780.0 1645.83664459 108% => OK
No of words: 293.0 271.125827815 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07508532423 6.08160592843 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04852973271 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.399317406143 0.374372842146 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.307167235495 0.287516216867 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.156996587031 0.187439937562 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0955631399317 0.113142543107 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47645201711 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566552901024 0.539623497131 105% => OK
Word variations: 59.5799406451 53.8517498576 111% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0529801325 77% => OK
Sentence length: 29.3 21.7502111507 135% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1859938156 49.3711431718 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.0 132.220823453 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3 21.7502111507 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.4 0.878197800319 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.39072847682 324% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 60.0167235495 50.5018328374 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.66666666667 1.90840788429 87% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.547875296968 0.549887131256 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.13440024898 0.142949733639 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0389226144108 0.0787303798458 49% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.746148592906 0.631733273073 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137003669315 0.139662658121 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.279255168639 0.266732575781 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404223339901 0.103435571967 39% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.370117740636 0.414875509568 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0252121446302 0.0530846634433 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.351333393099 0.40443939384 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831417618206 0.0528353158467 157% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 3.49668874172 200% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 9.0 10.2958057395 87% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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