TPO 48 - Integrated writing
According to the reading, frogs are declining in number and maybe they extinct in future, and this can causes severe issues for ecosystem. The article proposes few ways to overcome this problem. However, the professor consideres all of the solutions presented in the reading unpractical and refutes all of them.
First, the passage writes that pesticides harm frogs by attacking frog's nervous system and causes severe breathing problem for them. Farmers that use pesticides should be prohibited to use them because they are the main source of creating pesticides. In contarary to this, the lecturer points that reducing pesticides would not be fair and economical to farmers. This method increases the amount of farm waste and decrease the cultivation yield while in other areas that the law is not conducted other farmers can benefit from it because the first group farmers won't be able to compete with them anymore.
Second, the writing writes that fungus kill frogs by thickening their skin while frogs use their skin to absorb water and avoid dehydration. the passage suggests that scientists should apply antifungal medication to frogs to stop them from dying. In contrast to this, the lecturer says that reasearchers have to treat each frog individually and this can be very expensive. besides that, the treatment won't apply to their offsprings and scientists have to do the same process for their next generation.
Third, the article indicates that people should be banned to use water because they are threatening frogs by excessive use of water of frogs' habitats. However, the speaker proposes that this method won't fix the problem. The real threat is global warming not humans activities and this change won't solve global warming , nor frog population reduction.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
this can causes severe issues
this can cause severe issues
Farmers that use pesticides should be prohibited
Farmers who use pesticides should be prohibited
Sentence: However, the professor consideres all of the solutions presented in the reading unpractical and refutes all of them.
Error: consideres Suggestion: considers
Sentence: In contarary to this, the lecturer points that reducing pesticides would not be fair and economical to farmers.
Error: contarary Suggestion: contrary
Sentence: In contrast to this, the lecturer says that reasearchers have to treat each frog individually and this can be very expensive. besides that, the treatment won't apply to their offsprings and scientists have to do the same process for their next generation.
Error: reasearchers Suggestion: researchers
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 290 250
No. of Characters: 1471 1200
No. of Different Words: 150 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.072 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.472 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.953 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...lining in number and maybe they extinct in future, and this can causes severe issues for ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...be they extinct in future, and this can causes severe issues for ecosystem. The articl...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...blem. However, the professor consideres all of the solutions presented in the reading unpr...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... to absorb water and avoid dehydration. the passage suggests that scientists should...
^^^
Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...idually and this can be very expensive. besides that, the treatment wont apply to their...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 318, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nd this change wont solve global warming , nor frog population reduction.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, while, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 286.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23426573427 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55392853457 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534965034965 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9227744586 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.928571429 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439081545176 0.272083759551 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147723975299 0.0996497079465 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11937209142 0.0662205650399 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260866162351 0.162205337803 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712528113834 0.0443174109184 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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