TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task Like many creatures, humpback whales migrate long distances for feeding and mating purposes. How animals manage to migrate long distances is often puzzling. In the case of humpback whales, we may have found the answer:

The article and the lecture both discuss the theory behind humpback whales navigation system. The reading claims that it is possible that stars assist the whales to navigate. The lecturer, however, refutes the author's assessment and contends that stars has nothing to do with that..

The first allegation of the script against which the orator argues is the possibility intelligence help humpback whales to navigate. The lecturer refuted this point by stating that other non-intelligent animals like ducks also navigate with the help of stars, He asserts that ducks use the stars to navigate inspite of not being intelligent.In other words stars navigation has nothing to do with intelligence.
Secondly, according to the speaker stars do not assist whales to move in straight lines, instead, there are some bio magnetic receptors in the brain which helps whales to be directed in their movement. Ultimately, These magnetic receptors collect very sensitive information from the surroundings and direct whales Moreover, these receptors help whales to orient themselves and move in straight lines.

Finally, the lecturer contradicts the fallacy of the passage that whales spy-hop to look for information about their direction . He contends that sharks spy-hop, however,sharks spy hop not to navigate, but to search for a pray.Besides, whale sky hop during the day, when no stars are in the sky.Thus, sky hopping is a movement which is not related to the instinct of navigation.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Integrated TOEFL Writing

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 176, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...at stars assist the whales to navigate. The lecturer, however, refutes the authors ...
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Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ate. The lecturer, however, refutes the authors assessment and contends that stars has ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...s that stars has nothing to do with that.. The first allegation of the script a...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... stars has nothing to do with that.. The first allegation of the script against ...
^^^
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...gence help humpback whales to navigate. The lecturer refuted this point by stating ...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...vigate inspite of not being intelligent.In other words stars navigation has nothin...
^^
Line 4, column 238, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt. Ultimately, These magnetic receptors collect very sensitive information from ...
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Line 6, column 127, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ok for information about their direction . He contends that sharks spy-hop, howeve...
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Line 6, column 170, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , sharks
...He contends that sharks spy-hop, however,sharks spy hop not to navigate, but to search ...
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Line 6, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Besides
...t to navigate, but to search for a pray.Besides, whale sky hop during the day, when no ...
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Line 6, column 296, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...g the day, when no stars are in the sky.Thus, sky hopping is a movement which is not...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 233.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37768240343 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85149072286 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56652360515 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.6796283696 49.2860985944 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.222222222 110.228320801 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8888888889 21.698381199 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4444444444 7.06452816374 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34359917874 0.272083759551 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144651215754 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489300115629 0.0662205650399 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196709196913 0.162205337803 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179004813461 0.0443174109184 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.3589403974 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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