tpo 50 mission to Mars
The material discusses the concept of the challenges that will face human during their mission to Mars. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective, the listening challenges certain points outlines in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading details specific point regarding this topic, namely foods, oxygen and water would not be enough to the long trip to Mars. Next, Mars has zero-gravity, which is dangerous for the human body. Finally, the astronauts would be exposed to a harmful solar radiation.
Conversely, the listening challenges the points, one specific contradiction is human could use hydroponic plants, which are growing plants in water rather than soil. Hydroponic plants not only could provide humans with food, but also, they could recycle the waste waters to drinking ones; furthermore, the plants can take carbon dioxide out and provide humans with fresh oxygen to breath. In addition to that, there are safely precautions could be taken to minimize the harmful of zero-gravity, such as doing regular exercise to prevent muscles’ shrinking, and taking vitamins for bine density. One final point, the solar radiation in Mars is not damage all the time; moreover, there is special equipment, which is no heavy, could be used to monitor the dangerous radiation. When it is high the spaceship can stay in a small shilled area until the dangerous radiation has passed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oints outlines in the reading passage. Firstly, the reading details specific po...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...exposed to a harmful solar radiation. Conversely, the listening challenges the...
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Line 3, column 785, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sed to monitor the dangerous radiation. When it is high the spaceship can stay in a ...
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Line 3, column 890, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...til the dangerous radiation has passed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, while, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 22.412803532 27% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1184.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 225.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26222222222 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64534438468 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617777777778 0.540411800872 114% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7146981041 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.4 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3 7.06452816374 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0502246334561 0.272083759551 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0235810250804 0.0996497079465 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368155183214 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0382267032886 0.162205337803 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0122063381481 0.0443174109184 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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