TPO 52 integrated writing task

The reading and the lecture are both about colonisation on asteroids. The article's author feels that comparing to Mars or Moon colonisation, sending humans to asteroids is a smarter idea. The lecturer disputes the claims made in the article. His position is that the idea that asteroids colonisation is not practical and has a lot of downsides.

According to the reading, low gravity will be a merit for colonisation. The article mentions that low gravity will give spaceships a safer landing and increase spacecraft's shipping capacity. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims that low gravity makes astronauts facing more health risks.
Additionally, he points out that humans tend to lose their muscle masses in a long-time low gravity environment and the bone density also decreases.

Secondly, the author suggests that rare metals on asteroids will support the colonising missions more financially. The article says that asteroids are enriched with valuable metals, and the exploitation will be profitable. The lecturer, however, asserts that some additional factors may contradict the profit of metal exploitation. He says that the cost to support the transport of metals will be extremely high and reduce the profit, and the price of those metals will also decrease if there is more on quantities.

Finally, the author posits that the periodical movement of asteroids allows humans to take less time to reach them. The author contends that travel will be much easier and affordable if the distance between earth and asteroids is close enough. In contrast, the lecturer’s stance is that it will become a challenge for humans to return from asteroids. He notes that the orbits of the asteroids are close to earth sometimes but will also move away, and astronauts have to travel a further distance if they wish to go back.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... humans to asteroids is a smarter idea. The lecturer disputes the claims made in th...
^^^
Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'asteroids'' or 'asteroid's'?
Suggestion: asteroids'; asteroid's
...cle. His position is that the idea that asteroids colonisation is not practical and has a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 407, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'earth'.
Suggestion: sometimes earth
...he orbits of the asteroids are close to earth sometimes but will also move away, and astronauts...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 300.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20666666667 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81798982728 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553333333333 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0306482381 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8823529412 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17647058824 7.06452816374 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260563820753 0.272083759551 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817812057584 0.0996497079465 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538809663456 0.0662205650399 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128119126825 0.162205337803 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660117561142 0.0443174109184 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.