TPO46 integrated
The reading and the lecture discusses discusses arguments which are about electronic database of patients. The lecturer opposes each reasons explained by author that this approach is more better than paper forms. she states that these reasons are uncertain, and then she explains all of them.
First of all, the article mentions that it would be helpful to decline the costs. The author adds that if there is no coppying or faxing ang something like that, in addition to not require a significant storage space, it can be helpful to save much more money. The speaker says it wouldn't work because doctors will use paper forms in spite of electronic systems. Therefore, there are still paper forms used as back up.
Moreover, according to the lecture, the errors won't decrease because the doctors use paper forms while they're examinating patients. The information will be recorded later. On the basis of this claim, the second argument poineted out in the passage is contradicted by the speaker.
Finally, researching in the United state has a complex and long-term process, and requires some important permissions such as patient's permission to utilize their own medical information.Based on this policy of securing privacy, electronic recording systems wouldn't nessecary benefit. Although, the author says thatit would br a significant aid in medical research which is rejected by the lecturer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: discusses
The reading and the lecture discusses discusses arguments which are about electronic da...
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Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...plained by author that this approach is more better than paper forms. she states that these...
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Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...proach is more better than paper forms. she states that these reasons are uncertain...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ve much more money. The speaker says it wouldnt work because doctors will use paper for...
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Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...cause the doctors use paper forms while theyre examinating patients. The information w...
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Line 7, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Based
...o utilize their own medical information.Based on this policy of securing privacy, ele...
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Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...g privacy, electronic recording systems wouldnt nessecary benefit. Although, the author...
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Line 7, column 286, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ding systems wouldnt nessecary benefit. Although, the author says thatit would br a sign...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, then, therefore, while, in addition, such as, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1178.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 223.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28251121076 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73404361158 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645739910314 0.540411800872 119% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.2753348964 49.2860985944 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1666666667 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5833333333 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305767218485 0.272083759551 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906593361893 0.0996497079465 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614846807308 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156727392665 0.162205337803 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524781208288 0.0443174109184 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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