In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The reading and lecture are about converting the record of patients' medical story from paper forms to electronic system. In the reading, three probable benefit of adopting electronic devices for documents were proposed .The lecturer is the opinion of these suggestions are unconvincing.
Firstly, the author posits that cost needed for paper forms will diminish because the budget for storing, transferring, duplicating and faxing will be reduced since virtual devices will not facilitate those things with relatively easier solution. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. She states that doctors will still store the paper forms in light of needs associated with signature and legal matters although they utilize the advanced technology of document. Therefore, the expenditure corresponding to storing papers will be inevitably made irrespective of what form doctors will employ.
Secondly, in the passage, it is stated that many problems caused by the handwriting will not be in the electronic mode but paper structure. This is because doctors make mistake such as unreadable writing, inappropriate organization and transcription of information while writing with hand. Nonetheless, the lecturer refutes this idea by mentioning that doctors take notes with hand while inspecting people, and convert it to the electronic form based on the note taken with hand. Thereby, these problems will not be emancipated albeit experts start employing the technology.
Finally, the author claims that virtual arrangement of the data will provide support for researches because searching and taking care of myriads of paper will not be problem anymore. The lecturer, however, announces that research will be still arduous because experts must get permission from patients in accordance with privacy laws of the United States of America. Hence, researchers must follow elaborate and strict procedure in order to study the evidence. Furthermore, the people having ailment tend to block the use because of their attitude towards personal privacy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: .
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Message: Add a space between sentences
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Message: "needs associated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'associating' or 'to be associated'.
Suggestion: associating; to be associated
...store the paper forms in light of needs associated with signature and legal matters althou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 309.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6569579288 5.08290768461 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80714444003 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608414239482 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9321906234 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.857142857 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188931168193 0.272083759551 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677353543034 0.0996497079465 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933805412253 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121253535624 0.162205337803 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772816496399 0.0443174109184 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.3589403974 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 53.8541721854 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.2367328918 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.3 8.42419426049 122% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 63.6247240618 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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